此動名詞片語句子的改寫,請指正

Question

Being involved with reality and improving it is important to me.

投入現實生活並改善它,對我而言非常重要

若我改寫成

It is important for me to be involved with reality and to improve it.

1.如此的句子在考試上是否沒有原句來的好

2.句尾的''it''可不寫嗎?

Kevin大大,你太謙虛了
在知識中你的英文程度算是數一數二了
這裡的動名詞Being的確不能省略
By the way ,Kevin大大
我查字典involve{v} yourself後面是接in
involved{adj}後面才是接with
小弟迷惑 還望大大解說
謝謝

Answer 1

要評斷句子的好壞, 恐怕須要大師級的功力. 個人只能提供意見參考.
要改寫的話我覺得有幾個方向;
1. 用不定詞似乎比動名詞有力.
2. 對稱原則: 全部用主動, 避免使用 be 動詞.
3. 結合兩個動詞, 取代對等關係.
To involve myself with reality and improve it is very important ot me.
To involve myself with reality to improve it is very important to me.
至於 "It is..." 的句型是否沒有原句來的好, 個人並無意見. 但是句尾的 ''it'' 不可省略, 否則是 to improve myself 而不是 to improve reality.
另外, 我不認為原句開頭的 being 可以省略, 因為它是動名詞而非分詞.
*Kenny版主: 您另一篇我覺得其他網兄已經說的很清楚了.

2006-12-28 22:09:28 補充：
的確 to involve oneself in 的用法較為常見, 感謝您的提醒. 但是 with 也有人用(甚至into都有). 而 to be involved in 也很普遍.
個人的解讀是:
單純表達"與...有關聯", 卻不見得"身陷其中", 用 with.
若是有"親身投入""被捲入..."的語意, 用 in.

2006-12-28 22:09:56 補充：
http://72.14.235.104/search?q=cache:EoTPsU-zC5QJ:upen-patel.com/ involve myself with&hl=zh-TW&gl=tw&ct=clnk&cd=21

http://72.14.235.104/search?q=cache:ZbyECTa2j4AJ:blog.ospattern.net/ involve myself with&hl=zh-TW&gl=tw&ct=clnk&cd=28

2006-12-28 22:10:25 補充：
http://72.14.235.104/search?q=cache:eDeXfMFAkXAJ:bytenight.org.uk/meet_the_board.php involve myself with&hl=zh-TW&gl=tw&ct=clnk&cd=49

http://72.14.235.104/search?q=cache:ap2z_rQBwh8J:www.nwrel.org/nwedu/winter_97/article10.html involve myself with&hl=zh-TW&gl=tw&ct=clnk&cd=57

2006-12-28 22:10:34 補充：
http://72.14.235.104/search?q=cache:vKWNuG97q-UJ:rockstarjournalism.tripod.com/id41.html involve myself with&hl=zh-TW&gl=tw&ct=clnk&cd=60

http://72.14.235.104/search?q=cache:Krfr79yGijwJ:www.nea.org/parents/ involved in&hl=zh-TW&gl=tw&ct=clnk&cd=6