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Question

Revising:Comma splices and fused sentences
Identify and revise the comma splices and fused sentences in the following paragraph.

All those parents who urged their children to eat broccoli were right,the vegetable really is healthful.Broccoli contains sulfora-phane,moreover ,this mustard oil can be found in kale and Brus-sels sprouts.Sulforaphane causes the body to make an enzyme that attacks carcinogens,these substances cause
cancer.The enzyme speeds up the work of the kidneys then they can flush harmful chemicals out of the body.Other vegetables have similar benefits however,green,leafy vegetables like broccoli are the most efficient.Thus wise people will eat their broccoli it could save their lives.

Answer 1

All those parents who urged their children to eat broccoli were right,[comma splice] the vegetable really is healthful. Broccoli contains sulfora-phane,[comma splice] moreover ,this mustard oil can be found in kale and brussels sprouts. Sulforaphane causes the body to make an enzyme that attacks carcinogens,[comma splice] these substances cause
cancer.The enzyme speeds up the work of the kidneys [fused sentence, should be comma here]then they can flush harmful chemicals out of the body.Other vegetables have similar benefits [fused sentence, should be period or semicolon here] however,green,leafy vegetables like broccoli are the most efficient.Thus wise people will eat their broccoli [fused sentences, should be period or semicolon here] it could save their lives.
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所有的 comma splice 都應該以period 或 semicolon 取代