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Question

Good evening everyone,
Now I am going to talk about how the media should deal with the committed suicide problems. Fist of all, why the media always report this kind of news? I think maybe they can do anything for the higher TV rating, so the media always think the news which is more frightening is better. However, it will cause some problems. For example, news media (including newspaper, television and magazines) report the committed suicide problems every day. These problems not only are reported in detail, but also the way of committed suicide all shows so clear. People didn’t know the way for killing themselves before, but now they did know form news media.

Answer 1

Good evening everyone,
Now I am going to talk about how the media should deal with the committed suicide problems. Fist of all, why "would"（這不是間接問句，仍必須要有助動詞，would除了過去式，也有禮貌的用法）the media always report this kind of news? I think maybe they can do anything for the higher TV rating, so the media "might" think "more frightened the news" is better.

However, it "certainly" will cause some problems. For example, news media (including newspaper, television and magazines) report the committed suicide problems every day. These problems are not only reported, but also detailed the approach of committed suicide. People was not aware of this before, but now they have completely known and learned from these news media.

我用了部份副詞（在引號裡面的字）強調語氣，並且稍微修改了您部份的句子，以求順暢及完整。

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