英文自傳~麻煩幫我改正錯誤得地方!!

Question

老師規定要寫快滿一張A4紙的大小,只能想出這些,自傳還有什麼可以寫的嗎?
My name is christine . The constellation is Gemini ! live in Taichung . There are seven people in my family . including my parents , younger brother , three younger sister and me . My father works as farmer whereas my mother is a housewife .

I study in the university of Chiayi at present and receive a training of the sports department, Not the special specialty but likes playing the volleyball .(高中時曾參加排球社)這句不會翻

下面還有2段
When i have free time , I like to listen to the music , play basketball ,and read outside reading .by listening to the music can relieve my pressure .

I wish to be athletics teacher in the future . Hope in 4 years in the future, happiness that can get along with everybody , too.

我要翻的是英文喔~不小心弄到韓文了!!

那6月11日的英文要怎麼翻??
我是讀嘉義大學體育學系~翻法不知道~有人和我說可以這樣翻??

Answer 1

你好! 來自台中的朋友!
My name is Christine. My birthday is _________, so I am a Gemini ! (英文介紹自己星座不用說 constellation is..... 既然提及星座不如也說生日, 增加字數之餘也比較自然). I live in Taichung . There are seven people in my family, including my parents , younger brother , three younger sister and me . My father works as farmer, and (whereas 有對比的含義, 在這裡不用那麼嚴重) my mother is a housewife . My family live happily together and I sometimes help my parents in their work (純為增加字數而加的一句)

I am studying Physical Education at the Chiayi University. My favourite sport is volleyball although I am not very good at playing the game. I was a member of the volleyball club in high school. (你的學校的體育系是 sports department 嗎? 別的地方不會這樣稱呼. 介紹自己的主修時不一定要提什麼 <系 /department> . ) I enjoy playing the game and I hope that my skill could be improved with further training. (這句純為增加字數)
In spare time, I like listening to music, playing basketball , and reading. (作為愛好, like doing 比 like to do 好. 你想說閱讀課外書? 英文沒有這講法. read 就是閱讀, 指一切的書) I enjoy reading novels, fashion magazines, and histry books (這句也是加字數, 也可以說明你愛讀甚麼課外書). I enjoy listening to music, too, since I found it relaxing. My favourite composers are Mozart and Beethoven.

I wish to become PE teacher in the future . I hope that I could get along with everyone and enjoy the time here in the future 4 years.


2006-11-30 17:28:32 補充：
typo:first para. - 3 sisters3 para. I enjoy listening to music since I find it relaxing

Answer 2

幾好