幫忙看一下我的文法或者句子哪裡有錯

Question

我要上台介紹一部電影,幫忙看一下我哪裡有不對,文法.時態..等,把句子順便改通順一點。
順便附上中文:大家好,今天我想介紹一部電影,THE JACKET,這是一部劇情片,故事是敘述一個人發現他能夠透過一個奇怪的方法到達未來,但他卻發現,他幾天後將死亡,他想找出誰殺了他,並且改變未來,但是沒有人相信他,因為他被認為有精神上的疾病.故事將繼續下去,但我的介紹僅到此結束,因為不要把你看過的電影結局告訴沒看過的人.我覺得這是一部不錯的電影,如果有空的話,不妨去借來看看
英文:Hellow everybody,today I wanna introduce a motion picture, THE JACKET. It's a feature film. The story is about a man who can through a strange way to came to future And he discover he's going to die few days later. So, he wants to found the murderer out.And he wants to change the future.But no one believe him because he was considered a psychosis patient. The story will go on, but my introduction is end up. Because you never told the end to those who never the movie. I feel it's a very nice movie, so... I suggest, if you have nothing to do, you might borrow it at video shop.

Answer 1

Good moring!*Hello(請注意拼字)多用於日常打招呼. 正式上台宜用Good moring! or Good evening!*everybody是多餘的.Today I would like to introduce a motion picture, The Jacket. *非正式場合用wanna.It's a feature film about a man who could through a strange way go into the future and he discovered he would die a few days later.*前後兩句合併較簡潔*through a strange way是副詞片語, 不是動詞.*到未來去: to go into the future, 注意定冠詞the*注意動詞時態的前後一致In order to find the murderer out, he tried to change the future.*in order to 為了But no one believe him because he was considered a psychotic patient.*psychosis是名詞, psychotic才是形容詞 While the story goes on, my introduction ends up here, because you never tell the end to those who haven't seen the movie yet.*到此結束: to end up here*還沒看過: 要用完成式I feel it's a very nice movie, so I suggest that if you have nothing to do, you might rent it from a video shop.*到店裡去"租"(要花錢)而不是"借"(不用花錢)to rent a DVD from a video shopto borrow a book from a library 

Answer 2

發問的大大，根據你提供的中文我在這裡把我的一絲絲意見跟您分享一下，希望對你有幫助。

1.開頭：如果是跟同學或朋友介紹的話可以用everyone
Hello,everyone.

2.主題
Today, I'm gonna to introduce you a movie called " THE JACKET". It's a feature film.

3.主要內容介紹
The story is about a man who can get into the feature through a strange way. And then he discovers that he is going to die in a few days. He wants to find out the murderer and change the feature. However, no body believes in him. He is considered that he has a psychological problem.

4.將介紹做結束
Well..., the story is going on, but it's the end of my introduction.

5.個人推薦意見並結尾
I think that never tell the end of a movie to people who do not see it yet. It is a very nice movie. In my opinion you might borrow it at video shop and enjoy it during you spear time.

Answer 3

Hello everybody. Today I'd like to introduce a movie called, THE JACKET. This movie is a feature film. The story is about a man who finds out that he can use a strange way to go to the future. He finds out that he's dying in a few days, so he decideds to change the future by finding out the murderer. No one believes what he says because he is considered as a psychiatric patient. The story goes on, but my introduction ends here because you never tell the ending to those who haven't seen the movie. I think it's a very nice movie, so... I strongly suggest that, if you have spared time, you can borrow it at a video shop.


希望有幫助囉~~