看一下英文作文的文法(PartB)

Question

My assignment topic is to write an letter to my daughter who invites my to atted her same-sex marriage, and i as a (Roman) Catholic respond the reasons why i will not attend her wedding.
here it is:

The second reason is that the sexual love between women has being condemned starting from ancient sources. The reason being is that the “phallocentric model, the sexual activity requires a penetrator and a passive, penetrated partner” (Brooten). However, homoeroticism does not fit into this model. Also marriage is a divine ceremony, and for much recourse, it points out that homosexual acts do not follow the natural moral law, and therefore, they cannot be approved, as doctrine has said, “Homosexual acts close the sexual act to the gift of life. They do not proceed from a genuine affective and sexual complementarity. Under no circumstances can they be approved". Also until now, homosexuality is considered to be "as sin, as crime, and then as illness" (Gomes) Since that homosexual acts cause many problems, the Sacred Scripture homosexual acts is condemned "as a serious deprvaity...(cf.Rom 1:24-27;1 cor 6:10;1 tim 1:10). This comment from Scripture does not make us to make conclusion that the people with homosexual inclination are responsible for their personality, however, it emphasis more on that “the homosexual acts are intrinsically disordered” (doctrine). This comment is generally found in many Christian writers’ composition and is generally accepted by Catholic Tradition.

Answer 1

My assignment topic is to write a letter to my daughter who invites me to attend her same-sex marriage, and I as a (Roman) Catholic respond the reasons why I will not attend her wedding.
Here it is:

The second reason is that the sexual love between women has been condemned starting from ancient sources. The reason is that the “phallocentric model, the sexual activity requires a penetrator and a passive, penetrated partner” (Brooten). However, homoeroticism does not fit into this model. Also marriage is a divine ceremony, and for much recourse, it points out that homosexual acts do not follow the natural moral law, and therefore, they cannot be approved, as doctrine has said, “Homosexual acts close the sexual act to the gift of life. They do not proceed from a genuine affective and sexual complementarity. Under no circumstances can they be approved". Also until now, homosexuality is considered to be "as sin, as crime, and then as illness" (Gomes) since that homosexual acts cause many problems, the Sacred Scripture homosexual acts are condemned "as a serious depravity...(cf.Rom 1:24-27;1 cor 6:10;1 tim 1:10). This comment from Scripture does not make us to make conclusion that the people with homosexual inclination are responsible for their personality, however, it emphasizes more on that “the homosexual acts are intrinsically disordered” (doctrine). This comment is generally found in many Christian writers’ composition and is generally accepted by Catholic Tradition.

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Answer 2

題目也有文法錯誤，我在part c有回答了
你有一些很長很長的句子要小心喔
太多長的句子會減低文章的可讀性而且較容易出錯^^

The second reason is that sexual love between women is condemned according to ancient sources. The reason being is that in the “phallocentric model, sexual activities require a penetrator and a passive, penetrated partner” (Brooten). However, homo eroticism does not fit into this model. Also, marriage is a divine ceremony, and for much recourse, it points out that homosexual acts do not follow the natural moral law. Therefore, it cannot be approved. According to the Doctrine, “Homosexual acts close the sexual act to the gift of life. They do not proceed from a genuine affective and sexual complementarity. Under no circumstances can they be approved". Up to now, homosexuality has been considered to be "as sin, as crime, and then as illness" (Gomes) because homosexual acts cause many problems. In the Sacred Scripture, homosexual acts are condemned "as a serious deprvaity..." (cf.Rom 1:24-27;1 cor 6:10;1 tim 1:10). This comment from Scripture does not make us come to the conclusion that the people with homosexual inclinations are responsible for their personality. It emphasis more on that “the homosexual acts are intrinsically disordered” (Doctrine). This comment is found in many Christian writers’ compositions and is generally accepted by the Catholic Tradition.

2006-11-24 12:22:27 補充：
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