請幫我看看我的英文文法~~

Question

這是我的英文求職信，但英文程度不是很好，請英文達人幫我修改文法，感謝！！
To whom it may concern,

From 104 website I learned about your need for an administrative assistant with your company. I am very interested in this position. I believe I am an excellent candidate for the position.

As a recent graduate, my professional job experience is necessarily limited. However, I am organized and detail-oriented, work well under pressure and deadlines, enjoy working with a variety of people, and have a positive. I am sure that the combination of my strong interest and education will make me an asset to your marketing department.

To further acquaint you with the specifics of my background I am enclosing my resume. I hope you will consider me for this position. I would appreciate the opportunity to set up an appointment for an interview. I look forward to receiving your reply. Thank you for your time and consideration.

Sincerely,
XXX

因為英文不好~所以就用交付投票的方式~
先謝謝兩位英文達人的指教^^

Answer 1

To whom it may concern,From 104 website I learned about your need for an administrative assistant in your company. I am very interested in this position, for which I believe I am an excellent candidate.As a recent graduate, my professional job experience is inevitably limited. However, I am organized and detail-oriented, having a positive attitude with the ability to function well under pressure and deadlines as well as enjoy working with people from different backgrounds. I am sure that the combination of my profound interest and integrated education will make me an asset to your marketing department.To further acquaint you with the specifics of my background, a resume is enlosed herewith. I appreciate the opportunity for an interview and look forward to your reply. Thank you for your time and consideration.Sincerely,XXX Actually you have done pretty well, and here I am just offering some suggestions, in which I also learn a lot.Good luck!

Answer 2

To whom it may concern,

I learned that you have an administrative assistant vacancy in the marketing department from the 104 website. I am very interested in this position. I believe with my knowledge and positive attitude toward work and people will make me an excellent candidate for the position.

Because I just graduated from school, my work experience is inevitably limited. However, I have full confidence that I have every criteria you are looking for. I am organized and detail-oriented, work well under pressure and deadlines and enjoy working with a variety of people.

Attached to this letter is my personal information so that you may have a general picture of who I am and what I am capable of. I hope you will consider me for this position and appreciate an opportunity for an interview. I look forward to receiving your reply and thank you for your time and consideration.

2006-11-26 21:20:07 補充：
actually, you already did a great job of showing people who you are and what you want. so i only did minor change to your original content. please do not mind of my corrections.