英文演講稿--影響我最深的人.......請幫我改錯喔，謝謝

Question

Good afternoon, teacher and fellow students. My name is ***.
I am glad to make a speech here.

The most influence person in my life is my mother who’s the most optimistic person, always encouraged me and gives me fully support.

Firstly, my mother absolutely is an optimist, she always teach me looks on the bright side, even though I got a bad grades when I was a student, she never angry but just say “It’s not a big deal, there are more important things you will faced in the future.”, she let me develop a healthy mental.

Secondly, when I feel depressed or in low spirits, she would aware it and tell me “you are the best” to help me full of confidence, even I’m not satisfied with my appearance (too short and too fat), she would say “How come ? you’re looks cute and young. So I will also encouraged my friends just like my mothers treated me.

Finally, Due to I am not lived with my family, I lived alone in Taichung, when I return home, she likes to talking with me all day long until I leave, she just like my best friend to share my felling, ideas, ambition and always gives me great support, she makes me feel safe and likes sunshine warm my heart. So I think I am a complete person and can take care my self.

For these reasons, my mother definitely influence me a lot and made a mark in my mind forever, if I have amounted to anything, it will be due to her.

It’s my speech end today, thanks for your attention.

Answer 1

Good afternoon teachers and students. My name is ***.
I am glad to make a speech here.

The person who influences my life the most is my mother. She’s a very optimistic person, and she always encourages me and gives me fully support.

Firstly, my mother is absolutely an optimist, she always teaches me to look on the bright side. Even though I got bad grades when I was a student, she never got angry, she always says: “It’s not a big deal; there are a lot more important things you will face in the future.” My mother(上一句用過she了而且這是最後一句) helps me develop a healthy mental.

Secondly, whenever(變成你媽媽每次都能發現..比較厲害) I am feeling down or depressed, she will notice and cheer me by saying “you are the best” to help me refill my confidence, even when I’m not satisfied with my appearance (too short and too fat), she would say “How come? You are cute and gorgeous(年輕太普通了…). I also encourage my friends in the same way my mother treats me.

Finally, because I am not living with my family, I live alone in Taichung(這句可以去掉). When I return home, she likes to talk with me all day long until I leave, she just like my best friend who can share feelings, ideas and ambitions. She always gives me great support. She makes me feel safe like sunshine warms my heart(不曉得有沒有失去原意, 也許要分成兩個句子). Because of my mother (just a better transition), I think I am a complete person and able to take care of myself.

For these reasons, my mother greatly influence my personality and make a deep effect in my mind forever, if I have any success(不只指成就 個性也行), it belongs to my mother.

That’s my speech, thank you for your participate.

基本上寫的不錯了 就是要注意時態(真的很難…) 有些地方能用過去有些不行..