英文履歷，還請幫我看看需要改進的地方

Question

自己寫的英文履歷(求職用)，
還請高手幫我修正一下，文法的東西我有些都忘了，
像是什麼未來語句或什麼假設語句的，
要用什麼過去式還是什麼的，忘了！
麻煩高手過目，並不吝賜教，謝謝您！
註：不一定是文法不對才修正哦，若有錯字啦或該怎麼寫比較好啦或這樣寫不適合啦…等等任何意見都可給在下指教。

Being interested in the field of computer, I’d like to do any job about computer. What I like most is programming. Other like the 3D work, transforming and researching formats between multimedia, making animations, making and designing web pages, clipping and making movie clips, are all my hobbies.

I’m the eldest boy in my family. Beside the field of computer, my hobby is many ball games, surfing the Internet, seeing the movies and some hobbies like others’. I went to work and got economy-independent when I was graduated from senior high school, and I even lived alone for 1 and half years. During this period of time, I learned and knew a lot from the pressure of economy and live, and then, I became independent.

Talking about something special when I pursue my studies, I was usually the happy-maker in the class. My teachers always praised me for good handwriting. Since getting in touch in English at junior high school, I found myself interested in it and had more comprehension in grammar than others. After senior high school, I went to professional school to major the Information Management because I began to crazily love the field of computer.

I kept working after graduated from senior high school because I like to be economy-independent, and, there’s economic difficulty in my family. The latter reason was also why I couldn’t be a student of a graduate school (I’d passed an entrance examination of graduate school this year). But I’m not depressed; I plan to get some professional certificate as soon as possible to apply for a nice job. While I’m professional enough, in the future, I’d like to be the SOHO. And I think that is the trend of future work.

Answer 1

這是自我介紹吧，你知到一個獵頭人平均只花60-90秒看一篇履歷，我剛剛看的快睡著了!!I’d like to do any job about computer 要變成 I like any job computing related. 還有履歷的重點不是在Like 是在 what you are good at! you can say. I enjoy programing very much, I am also very good at 3D work, transforming and researching formats between multimedia, making animations, making and designing web pages, clipping and making movie clips, 你的HOBBY是球類運動不是電腦相關!!第2段根地4段結合，談一下你的背景+你獨立的例子，請要精簡至5-6行吧!不用寫你不會後悔你沒上研究所，WHO CARES? 只要加強你實地工作經驗和證照等等! 還有第3段幾乎是廢話! 沒有人需要一個 Happy maker 在他們公司，大家要的事一個 leader, team worker or co-ordinator不是一個JOKER?!! 還有你是書法大賽冠軍嘛? 或是你要申請一個寫字很重要的工作? 不然My teachers always praised me for good handwriting 這句話也是白說了! 還有履歷不要寫的太熱情OR PASSIONATE " crazily love " 是錯誤的用法!!說真的，太多要改了，請你先自己把廢話改掉再從新貼一次吧! 而且這叫做 開場白信，covering letter, resume 要是真的長這樣，你會被笑掉大牙的!

2006-11-13 17:43:26 補充：
第一段寫你為啥要申請這份工作第二段寫你的背景經歷等等第三段重申你為何適合這份工作第四段你高興寫你的BALLGAME 或是 其他興趣

2006-11-13 17:46:07 補充：
還有除非你是要博同情，要申請獎學金或是貸款，沒有一個人會因為她家裡貧困而在他申請表上加分的!! 不需要耍悲情牌!! 不是台灣選舉只是申請工作!!

2006-11-18 09:33:13 補充：
假如你整篇文章有提"自傳"兩字就算!
英文履歷(求職用)不等於自傳，在英文字典，中文字典，日語字典，甚至連山地人土話英文履歷(求職用) 跟自傳兩字都是不一樣的東西!!

下次問問題，請問對的問題，不要問錯了，東西亂寫，被人家當白吃罵才不爽!

Answer 2

我只能說您的回答另我笑掉大牙！我描述我的貧困並非為了博同情，我只不過是在introduce啊！我想若今天我是說我家裡經濟富裕所以送我到國外留學的話，你是不是又在說"不需要炫耀自己財富"？自傳就是一份關於自我介紹的小傳記，我"介紹"我喜歡球類運動也不對、我"介紹"我在學校時的一些較傑出的表現(非電腦相關)也不對，那你還"自傳"個屁啊？

2006-11-17 22:18:59 補充：
沒有人說自傳只是用來求職的，如果整個「自傳」只能講專長而且還要是電腦相關的，能寫幾句啊？您對所謂的"自傳"了解程度膚淺至極難以想像，通常求職用的自傳，是跟履歷表附在一起的，而履歷表裡早就清楚的寫明了一個人的專長、求學經歷、學校以及工作經驗，如果在自傳裡還一直"重覆"提這個部分，獵頭人看了才想睡覺呢！我只能說您的自我意識太高，純粹為了批評而批評，無聊至極！看完我的回應若有使您有所長進，或有需要請教我的地方，歡迎來信[e-mail]

2006-11-17 22:25:23 補充：
Grace及小粉兩位如果你們真的覺得 billy 的回答很好，那我想你們真的需要去翻一下"國語字典"查查「自傳 autobiography」是什麼意思。

2006-11-19 12:02:25 補充：
抱歉了，我的原意是要問「用在求職履歷中的英文自傳」，但我卻說成「英文履歷(求職用)」，造成誤會，深感抱歉！

Answer 3

Billy專家
收到你的來信了
我覺得你的回答很不錯
至少重點都有提到

那我就不回答嚕