請問哪位英文程度比較好的人，可以告訴我哪裡文法錯了?

Question

下列的英文文法有哪裡須修改，或是文章有哪些須修的通順一點?
Each position appraises professor to be good, my name is called ***, is born to the Taichung county, but is grows up in the Taibei county. At present on the state-run Taichung technology institute, majors in accountant, in my family has four people, the daddy, mother, the younger sister and I, because I am in family's eldest daughter, therefore the parents are also severer to my request. My individuality natural disposition is optimistic, when to setback and pressure, can choose facing but does not evade, and discovers road of the best solution. The interest aspect, likes with the friend gathering in the same place talks openly, so as to relaxes the mood, extends the solution pressure, even meets the each other clearing house study experience of and the attainment.

Answer 1

請問你第一句是想說什麼？
接下來，我名字叫XXX，請直接說My name is XXX.
在台中縣出生是過去的事，請盡量在前一句就用句點隔開.....
我沒看過有誰可以一句話一直逗點逗點個沒完沒了，懂嗎？
I was born in the Taichung county,至於在台北長大......請用過去完成式吧！
我不確定啦！台中科技大學是這樣寫的嗎？如果是，所有的字頭都要大寫喔！
I majors in accountant......會計師？還是會計學(Accountancy)?
There're four people in my family,daddy,mother,my yonger sister and I.
Because I'm the eldest daughter,有了because就不用therefore,然後my parents also request me senerely. 我的性格樂觀不用非要說成我個人天性樂觀，真要說天性，
My disposition is naturally optimistic.When the setbacks and pressures appeared,.......
but not evade.不用does,而且自述是第一人稱，要用也是用do囉！找方法可以說and always try to find the best way of solution.興趣方面？My interest is gathering with my freind ............這樣可以用來放鬆心情、解壓力，甚至彼此見面....最後一句是想表達什麼呢？先替你解到此。自己參考吧！^_^

Answer 2

建議把中文附上，要不然我看的霧沙沙..也不知道怎麼幫你修正