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Little women
“Little Women” is a story of four different sisters. Their family doesn’t have much money. But they always live in happiness and dreams. They share joys and sorrows together. With time, they become more sensible than before. This story is very pertinent in our life.
My favorite person in the story is Jo, the second oldest sister. She is very frank and brave. But she often got into troubles because of she is too impetuous. For instance, once her manuscript was burned out by the youngest sister, Amy. Even though Amy had said sorry to her, she didn’t excuse her at all. Until once Amy fell into a lake, she just knew her bad temper let her sister get hurt. After this event, she got out of her bad temper gradually.
Sometimes, my personally is really like Jo’s. She is the image of me. So she let me know something I do really make my family feel sad. I also learn to be more mature than before. Besides, other sisters have different defects, such as oldest sister, Meg. She has a vanity heart and likes pretty things very much. Finally, she knew to have a happy life is more important than wealth. By the way of steeling themselves, they become very independent.
Even though a pool life , we can also live very happy. Just have a optimistic heart!

Answer 1

Little women“Little Women”is a story of four sisters with different characteristics. Their family was not very wealthy, but they always lived happily with dreams, sharing joys and sorrows. As time passed, they became more sensible than ever. This story is just like our life.My favorite person in the story is Jo, the second eldest sister. She was very honest and brave, but she often got into troubles because of being too impetuous. For instance, once her manuscript was burned out by the youngest sister, Amy. Even though Amy had said sorry to her, she didn’t excuse her at all. Until once Amy fell into a lake, she knew her bad temper had let her sister get hurt. After that, she got out of her bad temper gradually.Sometimes, I feel I have a personality like Jo's. She is the image of me. So she let me know that I do make my family feel sad. I also learn to be more mature than before. Other sisters had different shortcomings. Take the eldest sister Meg for instance, she had a heart of vanity and loved fashionable things very much. But finally she got to know that a happy life is more important than a wealthy one. By way of steeling themselves, they became very independent.Though being poor, we can still live very happily, as long as we are optimistic!