Grammar Checking, Please

Question

Everyone has work pressure, main concern is how to dealing with.
For me, I would like to do more outdoor activities to release work pressure.
If my health can be maintained in a good condition continuously, then I can devote myself to the company and help it make more profits.


Please correct all grammar mistakes for me, thanks!

to tintin852,

release pressure -> easy to concertrate on work mentally

I think it is better not use the word "health"

can you edit the sentences for me again? thanks

Answer 1

Everyone has work pressure, and the main concern is how to deal with it. For an example, I would like to have more outdoor activities to express my pressure. If I could maintain a good/ constant condition, then I can provide my best to my company and contribute more profits.

I hope my answer can help, if you would like to correct it, feel free to do it!

Answer 2

Many people endures great pressure in their daily life but do not know how to deal with it. As for me, I like to spend more time outdoors as it helps to release tension. In this way, I believe I can maintain my health at an optimum level to work more efficiently.

Answer 3

Everyone has pressue at work, and the main concern is how to deal with it. For me, I like to do more outdoor activities to release the pressure. If I can maintain good health, I will then be able to devote myself to the company and help it generate more revenue.

Comments: I do not understand the correlation betwen your having a good health and being more devoted to your work. Healthiness does not imply or cause devotion :)

Answer 4

Every worker has a certain extent of pressure, the main problem is how to deal with it. For myself, I would do some outdoor activities as a mean of relieving the pressure. If I can maintain a constant healthy body condition, I trust that I can assist the company to earn more profit.