請幫我檢查這篇英文作文的文法

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因為我文法學的不好 每次遇到作文就會很苦惱
可是又不想交一篇爛文章給老師...所以想請各位幫我檢查一下
挑出裡面的錯誤 謝謝

First day, I would take them to visit the National Palace Museum and Chih-Shan Garden Plaza where have many Chinese antique and building. Next, we’ll have a dinner and go around in Shi-Lin Market. Second day and Third day, I would take them out to Jioufen and Danshuei to see local night scenes and take some photos. Besides, they can buy something about Handcrafts. Fourth day, I plan to take them to Taipei 101 because we could shopping in there and take elevator to 89 or 91 floor to see all Taipei city. Last day, we may go to Hsimending by MRT photo on sticker or rest in the Hotel until them return to their country.

Answer 1

ok 我幫你看一下..
First day不要單獨寫 前面應該加一些字 像 On the..or During...
第一段的them 要具體說出來 你朋友麼 還是你父母
第二段 antique 跟 building是複數 需加上 S . NEXT 改成 After that 會比較好
第二段後面 in the Shi-Lin Market.
第四段 Besides, they can buy handcrafts. 這樣就好 文章盡量不要出現something這個字
第五段 ..to the Taipei 101.....because we could go shopping there
第六段 take a elevator to 89th or 91th to see all the senery of Taipei city.
什麼是 Photo on sticker ....?
hotel 小寫 ; until they return to thier country.

2006-10-17 05:24:32 補充：
你在補充一下photo on sticker 你想寫什麼 在幫你想看看對不對

Answer 2

我幫你想一下@@"

我們把這篇演講分三段：

１　在ＸＸ時候，我遇見了我們老師…他給我的印象是…
２　每當我ＸＸ的時候，我都會向他……［要好話…說老師輔導你…］
３　結論［我的老師在我學習過程中扮演著ＸＸＸ…協助我迎向…］

※第１段要少…要把你在什麼時候預見、認識你們老師，簡短有力。
［在寫印象時盡量要說一些好話…不過要先從外貌之類的地方講起］

※第２段要是最多的…把老師幫助你的事情中舉兩三個例子［多成語、詞…］
［在這裡時要說老師對你幫助了什麼什麼事…中間穿插著許多好話］

※第３段是一個總結論，你們的老師對你來說是多麼的重要…協助你的學習。
［在這裡要說盡好話，千萬別講出你對老師的不滿及牢騷，引用些佳句］

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這些就是重點了，因為我不清楚你們老師的為人什麼的…

所以我沒辦法把你整文全部寫出來，不過這些絕對是重點。

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回 答 者： Alice ( 初學者 5 級 ) 1 票 [ 檢舉 ]
回答時間： 2006-09-16 19:46:48 ／ 修改時間： 2006-09-16 19:47:05

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Answer 3

ON THE first day, I would take them to visit the National Palace Museum and Chih-Shan Garden Plaza where THERE ARE many Chinese ANTIQUES and BUILDINGS, FOLLOWED BY HAVING DINNER and GETTING AROUND AT Shi-Lin NIGHT Market. ON THE second and THE third DAYS, WE WILL BE GOING to Jioufen and Danshuei to see local night scenes and take some photos. Besides, they can buy SOME HANDICRAFTS. ON DAY 4, WE ARE GOING SHOPPING AND TO GET TO FLOOR 89 OR 91 AT TAIPEI 101 TO HAVE A BIRD'S EYE VIEW ON THE WHOLE TAIPEI CITY. ON THE last day, we may go to Hsimending by MRT TO TAKE SOME PHOTOS on stickerS(大頭貼) or TAKE A rest in the Hotel BEFORE THEY return to their country.

2006-10-17 07:10:29 補充：
...TO FLOOR 89 OR 91 BY ELEVATOR...