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Question

There are five people in my family. I have parents and two brothers, both my parents are teachers, but they were retire already, because they are teachers, so they importance to our behave, morality and education, parents always communicative with us, and give us the best advance, so we can easily find the good way to touch the goal, my parents are also like my friends, we go to everywhere when we have good time, because all of our family like to travel, and l like go shopping with my mother, because even I already have a job, during that time my mother was still buying something for me , although I grow up already, in her mind, I still just like a little girl,
I have two younger brothers, one of them, graduate from master last year, now go to the army, he is a silence boy and he always pay attention on his work , so he can do everything well, that is I have to learn. The other one who is study in the university, he’s very similar with me, no matter outlook or personality, so we are very match. We always talk each other, and discuss something together, of course sometimes we still have argument, but just for short time, after that we just look like nothing happened. I really treasure my family, and love everyone. Because I know they will stay with me forever.

Answer 1

There are five people in my family, my parents and two brothers. Both my parents are teachers, but they were retired already. Since they were teachers, our behavior, morality and education are very important to them. My parents always communicate with us and give us the best advance, so we can easily find the better way to reach the goal. My parents are also like my friends. We go everywhere when we have time together because my family likes to travel. I like going shopping with my mother. Even during the time I had a job, my mother still bought things for me. Although I am a grown up, I am still just a little girl in her mind.
I have two younger brothers. One of them graduated from the master degree last year and now he is going to join the army. He is a quiet boy and he always pays attention on his work. That's why he can do everything well and that is what I have to learn. My other brother is studying in the university. He is very similar to me from the appearance to the personality. That's why we match each other very well. We always talk to each other and discuss things together. Well, we still argued sometimes, but just for a little while. After that, we just look like nothing had happened. I really treasure my family and love everyone, because I know they will stay with me forever.
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ㄟ... 我稍微幫你修改了一下, 請稍微過目一下。英文通常用中文直接翻會怪怪的。所以希望有一些幫你修改的地方能還保有你原來的意思囉。

Answer 2

There are five people in my family, including my parents and two brothers. Both my parents are teachers, but they are retired already. As teachers, they attach great importance to our behavior, morality and education. My parents always communicate with us and give us the best advice, so we can easily find the best way to achieve our goals. My parents are also like my friends. All my family like traveling, and we have a good time wherever we go. l like to go shopping with my mother, because in spite that I already have a job, my mother would still buy something for me while going shopping. Being a grownup already, I am still a little girl in her eyes.
I have two younger brothers, and one of them graduated with a master degree last year and now has joined the army. While he is reticent, he always pays attention on his work and does everything well, and that is what I have to learn. The other, who is still in college, is very similar to me, both in outlook or personality, so we get along very well. We always talk to each other and discuss something together. Of course sometimes we still have arguments for a short time, after which it would look just like nothing has happened . I really treasure my family and love every one of them, because I know they will stay with me forever.

2006-10-13 11:48:46 補充：
訂正:Both my parents were teachers, but they are retired already.

2006-10-13 11:52:30 補充：
訂正:...he always pays attention to his work...

Answer 3

teachers的這個單字可能要加一個 - 的符號喔!因為他是一體的單字不能分開這樣會比較好!建議的~幫不上忙但是懂一點皮毛而已