這是我寫的英文短文,有人能幫我看有沒有錯嗎?

Question

Cory visited the Lung-Shan Temple on August 1st.
I did not know why he wanted to go there.
On Thursday, he climbed the Yushan Mountain.
I think that he really like sports.
This Sunday, he went to Kenting and went to sunbathe by the sea. .
He really enjoyed it.

能幫我看看那裡有問題嗎?? 還有我想問第一行的8月1號 我如果還要插入禮拜一
該怎麼修改??文章的時態是過去式
還有我墾丁有拼錯嗎?? WORD 都顯示拼錯...

因為是第一次寫文章,所以寫的很遭
我們這是仿照全民英檢的...有三個圖片
一個是Corry去龍山寺一個是去玉山一個是去墾丁
我們老師說寫4.5個句子,一個句子10個字左右
我就這樣寫了....

Answer 1

Cory visited the Lung-Shan Temple on Monday, first (1st) of August.
I do not know his reason for going there.
*注：你的句子也可以，但是這樣寫比較通順。
He climbed the Yushan Mountain on Thursday.
I think that he really like sports.
This Sunday, he went to Kenting and had sunbath at the beach.
*注：sea 是指海，但是日光浴應該是在沙灘(beach)才對。
He really enjoyed it.

Answer 2

你的問題還不在英文。你所謂的「短文」只是把幾件不相關的句子湊起來，文章不知道要表達什麼？才是問題所在。