[英文]比對加修改一些句子10點

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Justin Guarini(賈斯汀葛瑞尼)同名專輯_2003 這首歌辭是收錄在Justin Guarini的首張個人專輯中!歌詞是我自己翻的~有很多都不太正確~我不知道到底要怎翻才會好!!我只是個國中生~這對我來說是有點困難Baby come close, let me tell you this進來吧  讓我告訴你我的心意In a wish from my heart says you know it too在我心中的一個願望Maybe we both share a secret wish這是我們心中的秘密And you're feeling my love reaching out to you你感覺到我在愛你嗎Timeless, don't let it end oh永恆的愛  一段沒有結局的愛Now that you're right in my arms where you should stay你在我的雙臂Hold tight baby緊緊的把我抱住Timeless, don't let it fade out of sight永恆的愛  別讓相愛的感覺消失Just let the moments sweep us both away讓這時間離我們很遠Lifting us away, we both agree很遠很遠This is timeless, love這是永恆的愛I see it all baby in your eyes我在你的眼睛中看到答案When you look at me, you know I feel it too (yes I do)在你看著我時  你也清楚的了解我在想些什麼So let's sail away and meet forever baby讓我們坐著船直到航行永遠Where the crystal ocean melts into the sky看著清澈的海洋漸漸變成天空We shouldn't let the moment pass (moment pass)我們這次不會讓這瞬間消失Making me shiver, let's make it last讓我感動的瞬間Why should we lose it?我們為何得要失去這瞬間呢?Don't ever let me go你不會離開我 對吧?Yeah yeah yeah yeeeaah yeah耶~Baby it's timeless (oh baby it's timeless) 寶貝~這是沒有盡頭的愛Timeless永恆的愛Don't let it fade ohhhh time永恆的愛  別讓相愛的感覺消失Just let the moments sweep us both away讓這時間離我們很遠Lifting us away, we both agree很遠很遠We both agree this is timeless我們都知道這是一場沒有盡頭的愛This is timeless, love是一場永恆的愛

你們大家幫我把這個中英文對照歌詞的翻議改到最好

如果回答字數已經到達上限

其他修改到最好的歌詞就寄到我的信箱吧

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Answer 1

(我是儘量忠於英文原意而翻﹐如果你不是拿去配原譜作成翻譯歌﹐就可加以潤飾﹐不必拘泥字數的限制﹔最後兩段我沒有做字數的修改)
Baby come close, let me tell you this(8)
靠進點 讓我告訴你
In a wish from my heart says you know it too(11)
或許是個你已知曉的心願
Maybe we both share a secret wish(9)
我倆不約而同的心願
And you're feeling my love reaching out to you(12)
你感覺到我在愛你嗎

Timeless, don't let it end oh(7)
愛你永遠 沒有終點(或﹕天長地久)
Now that you're right in my arms where you should stay(11)
擁你入懷﹐你命中的歸宿
(原意﹕你正在我的懷抱裡﹐我的懷抱是你該留下來的地方)
Hold tight baby
抱緊我
Timeless, don't let it fade out of sight(9)
無盡的愛 別讓它消褪
Just let the moments sweep us both away(10)
就讓此刻帶著我們一起消失(註﹕讓此刻停格之意)
Lifting us away, we both agree(8)
帶著我們遠離世界
This is timeless, love(5)
這就是永恆﹐愛人(直到永遠﹐愛人)

I see it all baby in your eyes(9)
我在你眼中看到答案
When you look at me, you know I feel it too (yes I do)(11)
當你看著我﹐就了解我在想什麼
So let's sail away and meet forever baby(12)
讓我們揚帆而去﹐你我永不分
Where the crystal ocean melts into the sky(11)
直到清澈的海洋沒入天際
We shouldn't let the moment pass (moment pass)(8)
別讓此刻溜走﹐而要
Making me shiver, let's make it last(9)
永續讓我戰慄的瞬間
(last是持續﹑延續)
Why should we lose it?(5)
何必放它走?
Don't ever let me go(6)
你不會離開我吧?

Yeah yeah yeah yeeeaah yeah
耶~
Baby it's timeless (oh baby it's timeless) (5)
寶貝~這是無盡的愛
Timeless
永恆的愛
Don't let it fade ohhhh time(6)
時光啊﹐別讓愛凋謝
Just let the moments sweep us both away
就讓此刻帶著我們一起消失
Lifting us away, we both agree
帶著我們遠離世界
We both agree this is timeless
我們都知道這是一場沒有盡頭的愛
This is timeless, love
一場永恆的愛﹐愛人