英文文法問題[急]

Question

Francie loved to see her mother grind the coffee. Her mother would sit in the kitchen with the coffee mill clutched between her knees. Grinding away with a furious turn of her left wrist. The room filled up with the rich odor of freshly ground coffee.
其中Grinding away with a furious turn of her left wrist. 是Fragment 請問要怎麼改呢?
還有 The day of my eighteenth birthday, the reservations made at a fine restaurant.
My father came home early from work.
這句的問題在哪?要怎麼改?

Answer 1

將knees 和 Grinding之間的句點刪除並將G改為小寫就可以了。

sit+動詞+ing就是“坐著做....”的意思﹐此處的“sit grinding”就是“坐著磨...”﹐而“with the coffee mill clutched between her
knees”是說明“sit”狀態的副詞片語。

“The day of my eighteenth birthday”不能單獨立存在﹐必須加上介系詞形成時間的副詞片語來使用﹐也就是“On the day of my
eighteenth birthday”﹐可精簡為“On my eighteenth birthday”。

如果“the reservations made at a fine restaurant”當成是一個句子﹐則句中的“reservations”就成了主詞﹐成為 “made”這個及物動詞的行為者﹐但因“made”後面缺了受詞而變成不知所云﹔如果要表達的是“在一家高雅的餐廳訂了位”﹐必須改為﹕“we made the reservations at a fine restaurant”的主動語態或“the reservations was made at a fine restaurant”的被動語態。在被動語態的狀況下就可以不必提及“誰”訂了餐廳。

至於“My father came home early from work.”是否適合以“because”連接上一句﹐就看“訂了餐廳”與“爸爸早回”這兩件事之間有無因果關係。如果有意凸顯“爸爸早回”是因為“訂了餐廳”﹐就用“because”﹕“On my eighteenth birthday, my father went home early from work because the reservations was made at a fine restaurant ”﹔如果兩者不相干(例如﹕即使在家慶生爸爸也會提早回家幫忙準備)﹐就用“and”﹕“On my eighteenth birthday, we made the reservations at a fine restaurant and my father went home early from work ”

Answer 2

Grinding away with a furious turn of her left wrist.
這個fragment可以直接接在前一句後面變成一個句子
Her mother would sit in the kitchen with the coffee mill clutched between her knees grinding away with a furious turn of her left wrist.
或是你要獨立成一句必須加主詞
After that she ground away with a furious turn of her left wrist.

The day of my eighteenth birthday, the reservations (was) made at a fine restaurant.
這句少了動詞was
建議可以改成主動寫法
The day of my eighteenth birthday, my brother made the reservations at a fine restaurant.

The day of my eighteenth birthday my father came home early from work because
my brother made the reservations at a fine restaurant.

這是我想到的寫法