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The international migrants are playing an increasingly important role in globalization as the world enters the twenty-first century. In this paper we will discuss the costs and benefits of this new wave of migration.

Theories of migration traditionally distinguish between push factors and pull factors. In the case of economic migration (usually labour migration), differentials in wage rates are prominent. Poor individuals from less developed countries can have far higher standards of living in developed countries, than in their originating countries. Escape from poverty is a traditional push factor, the availability of jobs is the related pull factor. The migrants may plan to send remittances to their family, it may help to significantly reduce poverty and equalize incomes.

According to the Report of the Yale Global, most international migrants are in the high-income developed countries. There are many factors of migration. Firstly, for some migrants, education is the primary pull factor. As far as developing countries are concerned, is its “brain drain”. They able to find work in the developed world are those who are well educated. The reason for “brain drain” is that the primary labor market has relatively highly skilled and well paid. For example, official statistics suggest that 228, 000 Poles have registered to live and work in Britain since Poland joined the EU in May 2004.

Second, some migration is for personal reasons, based on a relationship.In a few cases, an individual may wish to immigrate to a new country, in a form of transferred patriotism.

In conclusion, reports the World Bank, that developed and developing nations improve their cooperation on the issue. Neither group can hope to stop international migration, but, if they play their cards right, both can hope to benefit from it.

請看清楚是定政不是翻譯OK

Answer 1

*As the world enters the twenty-first century,* the international *migration is* playing an increasingly important role in globalization. *This paper* will discuss the costs and benefits of this new wave of migration.

Theories *reveal that migrations* traditionally *are caused by either push factors or pull factors*. In *a* case of economic migration (usually labour migration), differentials in wage rates are prominent. *Individuals from poor or* less developed countries can have far higher *living qualities* in developed countries, than in their originating countries. *Escaping* from poverty *has been* a traditional push factor, the availability of jobs is *a* related pull factor. The migrants may plan to send remittances to their family, *which* may *significantly help* reduce poverty and equalize incomes.

According to the Report of the Yale Global, most international migrants *go for* the developed countries *where provide higher-incomes*. *He also stated that there* are many factors of migration. *Two major factors are mainly discussed.*

Firstly, for some migrants, education is the primary pull factor. As far as *what those* developing countries are concerned** is *their* “brain drain”. *Who are* able to find work in the developed world are those who are well educated. The reason for “brain drain” is that the primary *workforce* has relatively highly skilled and well paid *workers*. For example, official statistics suggest that 228,000 Poles have registered to live and work in Britain since Poland joined the EU in May 2004.

Second, some migration *may be caused by* personal reasons, based on a relationship. In a few cases, an individual may wish to immigrate to *another* country, in a form of transferred patriotism.

In conclusion, *reported by* the World Bank, ** developed and developing nations *have improved* their cooperation *efforts*on the issue. Neither *could* hope to stop international migration, but, if they play their cards right, both will benefit from it.

2006-08-29 00:59:54 補充：
你寫得很好, 只能說是文法沒有太大錯誤的地方
但是句子都不能明白陳述你想要表白的意思...
對我一個讀者來說, 每一句都點到一個重點, 卻沒有盡情發揮
且跟上下句沒有相當的關聯性

Answer 2

會不會太狠了丫?給5點讓翻這麼多，建議找翻譯社比較好…