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Promoting higher education

Many college students do not pleasure to study abroad,
competing not enough,either.Many people do not apply for
the top of the college in America.aferwards the government
subsidizes NT$50 billion over a five-year to the college the
top 12th in Taiwan, sending students to pursue further education
to the good college or the laboratory abroad.

In order to let the college I read can advance in the world\'s
top 100 renowned college in ten years,I think I can contribute for
the college. finding having a common goal friend, and study hard on
the professed subject, and change climate in the class room.
In addition to change the climate image the college is for others,
promoting positively foreign language I have, and taking a broad
view at national with the target.

were I do silently, trusting contribution a lot of the college I read
,and promoting the whole competing on the internert, and concertanting
NT$50 billion over a five-year as posible as I can.

提升高等教育

國內大學生近年不太願意出國留學
競爭力也不夠
很多人都申請不到美國頂尖大學
所以才會有五年五百億高等教育專案補助的十二所頂尖大學合作
共同送學生到國外頂尖的大學或實驗室進修

為了能讓自己所讀的大學可以在十年之內擠進世界前一百有名大學內
我覺得目前可以對學校有貢獻的是
在現階段在學時間時
可以找同志道合的好友
一起致力專研於所學的專業科目
主動帶起班上整個讀書風氣
甚至可望改變整個學校給予外人的固有形象
並積極提升自我外語能力
以未來放眼國際為目標

若能從自身默默做起
相信對目前所就讀的大學有一定程度的貢獻
進而可以提升台灣在整個國際村的競爭力
把五年五百億的經費發揮到極緻

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Many college students do not pleasure to study abroad，
competing not enough，either。Many people do not apply for
the top of the college in America。

aferwards the government
subsidizes NT$50 billion over a five-year to the college the
top 12th in Taiwan， sending students to pursue further education
to the good college or the laboratory abroad。

In order to let the college I read can advance in the world's
top 100 renowned college in ten years，I think I can contribute for
the college。

Finding having a common goal friend，and study hard on
the professed subject， and change climate in the class room。
In addition to change the climate image the college is for others，
promoting positively foreign language I have， and taking a broad
view at national with the target。

were I do silently， trusting contribution a lot of the college I read
，and promoting the whole competing on the internert， and concertanting
NT$50 billion over a five-year as posible as I can。

感覺好像是翻譯網頁直接對翻出來而已

Answer 1

前12在台灣，派學生追隨繼續教育 到好學院或者實驗室在國外。 為了讓我讀的學院能在世界的裡前進 在10 年內的前100 著名的學院，我認為我能貢獻為 學院。 發現有一位共同目標朋友，並且努力學習在上 被以教授身分教的學科和在教室方面的變化氣候。 除改變這幅氣候圖像之外學院是給其它人， 肯定促進我有的外語，並且帶寬闊的部分 在用目標國家的意見。 是我悄悄做，相信捐款許多我讀的學院 ,並且促進在internert上競爭的全部，以及concertanting 超過5 年的象我一樣posible的NT 美元500億。 Improve higher education Domestic university students are not very willing to go abroad to study in recent years There is enough competitiveness A lot of people can not apply in the top university of U.S.A. 12 top university cooperation that will just have been that 50 billion higher education special projects will be subsidized for five years Send students and go to the top university or laboratory to receive a training together For make one's own studied in university can get into world in the 100 famous university within one year It can be contributory to the school at present that I think While studying time at the present stage Can look for comrade's good friend of one one Devoted to grinding it in professional subjects studied specially together Atmosphere that study entirely on bringing to the class voluntarily Can be even expected to change the whole school and offer inherent image of the stranger's And improve from the ability of my foreign language actively Regard taking a broad view of world in the future as the goal If can be from do one quietly by oneself Believe that has contribution of a certain degree to the university studied in at present And then can improve the competitiveness in the whole international village of Taiwan Bring the funds of 50 billion in five years into full play

Answer 2

Many college students are reluctant to study abroadand they are less in competence.  Many people is never eligible for colleg admissions at top rankers in America. Thus, our governmentsubsidizes a five-year plan budgedted with NT$50 billion available for the top 12 colleges in Taiwan, sending students to for advanced studies at excellent colleges or labs abroad.In order to let my college advance in the world'stop 100 renowned colleges in ten years,I think I can individually contribute to my own college by finding having a common goal friend, study hard on the rofessional subjects, and change climate of academic atmosphere. In addition to changing the my college image to others' mind, I can positively promote foreign language literacy aimed at global visions. If I endeavor for that silently,  I firmly believe that I can bring wit lots of contribution to my own college. In addition, it is available to promote the overall competence of Taiwan among the global communities.  I can exert the budget effect of NT$50 billion for the five-year plan as posible as I can.參考一下囉  因為你寫我才改[e-mail]://tw.myblog.yahoo.com/twntnacys 切磋一下 認為翻得好到我的網址和部落格捧個人場 不一定要用我的服務 純知識交流囉 幫個忙選我的答案為最佳解答 免得投票令人糟蹋 (亂投票已有6百多分被糟蹋掉了)