請大家盡量的幫我改>\"<
我寫的很簡單>\"<
而且超少的...
文法應該....= =\"
如果要加哪些句子...請幫我加>\"<
所以請大家幫幫我>\"<
我會選最好的給點數...拜託了..各位...
題目是Newspapers...
內容:
Newspapers are convenient for us. When we have no time to watch news. We can read the newspapers to know what happen today. Newspapers have some parts. Like about government affairs, entertainment,life current events, sports, individual opus and so on. Every family have more than one newspapers. We can increase common sense and intellectual.
What shortcoming about newspapers? Some people make use of advertisements to do ruin somethings. Like find jobs. We can see one part about works, but we don\'t know what is true and what is false. In conclusion, if we take a good advantage of using newspapers not doing bad things, nothing crimes happen.
2006-06-24 14:30:21 · 4 個解答 · 發問者 PEI 2 in 社會與文化 ➔ 語言
ㄜ...有些字跳到下面...沒連在一起...
2006-06-24 14:31:08 · update #1
如果斷字的話...請到下面網址來看= ="
http://www.wretch.cc/blog/fihn2004&article_id=3884310
2006-06-24 14:38:32 · update #2
對了...如果幫我改時...要幫我提出一下...改哪裡= ="
謝謝大家>"
2006-06-24 14:40:44 · update #3
Newspapers are convenient for us. When we have no time to watch the news, we can read newspapers to keep up on current events. Newspapers have different sections, for example, ones about government affairs, entertainment and the arts, current events, sports, and so on. Therefore, reading newspapers can help us grow in many areas. Most families subscribe to more than one paper. These can help increase our common sense and knowledge.
What are some of the disadvantages of newspapers? Some people use advertisements to post dishonest things and exploit people. When we look for jobs in the paper, we can only see a part; we cannot determine what is true and what is false. In conclusion, if we take a advantage of using newspapers and do not do bad things, crimes would not happen.
-"When we have no time to watch news." 不是完整句子
-要不就用"we can read newspapers," 要不就用"we can read the newspaper"比較妥
-"parts" 這個字很含糊籠統, 正式文章少用
-"opus" 是指音樂家的作品編號,這裡不 make sense
-"Every family has more than one newspaper." "every" 是用單數動詞. "more than one" something 後面是接單數
-"intellectual" 是形容詞
-"What shortcoming about newspapers?" 不是完整句子
-"to do ruin somethings" doesn't make sense--可以說 "to ruin something"
-"Like find jobs." 不是完整句子
-"We can see one part about works"--"works" 指什麼不明
-"take a good advantage of"--可以說 "take advantage of"
-"nothing" 是名詞,要說 "no" crimes happen.
2006-06-24 18:59:32 · answer #1 · answered by ? 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Newspapers have brought convenience to our daily life.
第一句應該是這樣子, 怎麼上面三個人都不先改第一句呢?
2006-06-24 19:47:36 · answer #2 · answered by helen 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Newspapers are convenient to us. When we have no time watching news, we can read newspapers to know what have happened today. Newspapers have some parts. Like government affairs, entertainments, life current events, sports, individual literature and so on. Each family has more than one newspaper. We can increase common sense and intelligence by reading newspapers.
What is the disadvantages of newspaper? Some people use advertisements to ruin something. Like finding jobs, we can see one part of works, but we can't make sure which is genuine. In conclusion, if we take a good advantage of using newspapers and not do bad things, no crimes would happen.
1.convenient to us 報紙「對於」我們來說很方便 ，「對於」我們介係詞應該用to
2. no time (in) Ving 所以 應該寫成 have no time watching news
3. When S + V....., s + v..... . 中間要有逗點，主要子句主詞小寫
4. opus 偏指音樂作品，報紙上的應該是文學作品 ，故用literature
5. intellectual 形容詞，應該轉成名詞 intelligence
6. What is the disadvantages of newspaper? 這樣寫會比較好
7. do ruin something do 要拿掉
8. 每個家庭應該用each family 而不是 every family ，並且注意雖然family是集合名詞，動詞還是用單數 is
9. to know what have happened today 畢竟事情已經發生，用完成式比較能夠表達意思
10. make use of 是「利用」，不過是「好的利用」，文章中您的意思是 利用這些廣告來壞事，這裡的利用是負面的，不應該用make use of
以上提出十點文法問題，希望對您有幫助
基本上這篇文章讓我感覺起來怪怪的，not fluent，不是很通達，可能是在用詞上的拿捏，畢竟某些單字中文解釋都一樣，用在英文文章中可不一樣了，所以我們盡量不要以中文文法去思考英文作文!
2006-06-24 15:45:11 · answer #3 · answered by 威廉 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Newspapers are convenient for us. When we have no time to watch news. We can read the newspapers to know what happen today. Newspapers have several parts. Like about government affairs, entertainment,life current events, sports, individual opus and so on. Every family has more than one newspapers. We can increase common sense and intellectual.
What shortcoming about newspapers? Some people make use of advertisements to do ruin somethings. Like find jobs. We can see one part about works, but we don't know what is true and what is false. In conclusion, if we take a good advantage of using newspapers not doing bad things, nothing crimes happen.
2006-06-24 14:38:30 · answer #4 · answered by 璇0927059069 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋