幫我改翻譯..我翻的不是很好..想請人幫我看順便改..謝..

Question

可是，在施予「懲罰」的同時，我們是否已經認清懲罰的合理性與目的？每一次孩子們接受懲罰時，是否已經知道自己所犯的過錯？孩子在接受懲罰前是否已經被告知其內容。懲罰完畢我們是否有觀察孩子的行為直到改善為止。答案是對的。如果懲罰偏離合理性與目的，就淪為大人們出氣甚至是洩忿的一個管道，對孩子沒有任何的幫助，甚至是有害的暴行。
對於「對小孩最有效的懲罰方法」中感到有效的前五項分別是：挨罵、罰寫、罰站、禁止下課與嘮叨。而另一項透露的訊息，我們也可以解釋為：教師或家長的懲罰方式對孩子們而言至少是有效的。
Because when children accept desert, the parents should let children know their faults. And tell children the faults before they are accept desert. After the desert, the parents still to observed children’s behavior until they are improve. The above-mentioned of conditions, the parents doesn’t know whether desert is difficult. The answer is yes. If desert to deviate rationality and purpose, that will become a channel of parents to give vent to one\'s indignation. It’s not any help for children, even become a violent behavior. The effect desert way for children is to be scolded、copying、stand by the wall and don’t let children to get out of class. And the other message, we can explain: teacher or parents‘s desert way is effect for children.

上面的英文是我自己翻的..翻的很不好..想尋求英文高手的幫忙.幫我把這篇
文章改順一點..中翻英.
不要用翻譯軟體翻!!!!!!!
討厭翻譯軟體的..根本是亂翻!!!!!

Answer 1

BUT when children accept PUNISHMENT, the parents should let children know their faults. And tell children the faults before they are BEING PUNISHED. After the PUNISHMENT, the parents SHOULD observe THEIR children’s behavior until IMPROVEMENTS ARE SHOWN. [The above-mentioned of conditions, the parents doesn’t know whether desert is difficult](這句是從哪裡冒出來的呀??). The answer is yes. If THE PUNISHMENT SERVES TO PURPOSE AND ISN'T FAIR, THIS will become a WAY FOR parents to give OFF THEIR ANGER ON THEIR CHILD. It’s not GOING TO HELP THE CHILD, IT WILL BE A violent behavior FROM THE PARENT. The FIVE MOST EFFECTIVE PUNISHMENT for children is to be scolded、COPY LITERATURE、stand by the wall and NO BREAK. ANOTHER MESSAGE, we can INTERPRET IT AS: THEACHER AND PARENTS' PUNISHMENT ARE EFFECTIVE ON KIDS.

主要只要注意單字的用處
像
懲罰=punishment
但是=But

等等
只要注意這些
大大的文其實還翻的不錯喔!
有些小地方句子構造怪了點
不過是可以改進的!

Answer 2

You can try this:

However, just at the moment when we execute the punishment, do we really well recognize the rationality and goals for punishment? Every time when children are under punishment, do they really know the exact errors they commit? Before children receive the punishment, is there any reason for punishment been told already. After the punishment is completed, do we really pay close attention to children's behaviors till all of them have been rectified. The answer is “yes”. If the punishment deviates from its original rationality and goals, it is nothing but a rage outlet for adults but bring no favor to children, even more worse resulting in harmful violence ultimately.
About the first 5 most effective ways to punish children are separately ranked at scolding, penalty homework writing, penalty stand-up, grounded during off-class hours and muttering. About another message revealed, we can pose an explanation that at least the punishment ways executed by teachers or parents will be effective for children.

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