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Some businesses do anything to make a profit, I think they are overdo sometimes. The interplay between devote and self-interest which influences business\'s successful or fail.
Businesses should have a moral duty and obligation. For example, some factory to disturbing environmental influences, the owner of factory should measures to protect the environment, prevent spoiling it further, and review their result of an attempt how to produce a favourable response from the public, also help he to build a better business.
All the past entrepreneur who would not have succeeded in such a risky business if he had not been such a contribute entrepreneur. I didn\'t mean to pay to exchange fame and gain, but I think business show out their kindness. they can vaise business image, and help they became noted business.
The benfit match, performance, concert is a new enterprise, some company will holding become an annual event. Although this decision can\'t received any money in beginning, that can made a strong impression on audience or customer. Also have a beneficial result for business.
Conclusion, businesses can do any thing to make a profit, just must considering another people and public benefit.

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Answer 1

Some businesses would try to do anything to make any profit. In my opinion, they sometimes have overdone what they should have been doing.What I actually believe is that the relevance between a business's dedication and interest itself would affect its being able to be successful or not..That is to say, businesses should have a sense of morality and obligation. For example, it is possible or foreseeable that a newly established factory would cause various environmental impacts, the management of that factory should come up with some effective measures in the earliest time to protect the environment and to prevent any possibly adverse pollution. Additionally, the report on the environmental impacts should be open to and reviewed by the public in order to get any kinds of feedback. The comments from the public may help the owner build a better business.My study showing that in the past that all those entrepreneurs who did not succeed in risky businesses is most likely because they did not make efforts in presenting what impacts a business would bring to an environment.  I do not mean that a business could exchange its fame with its gain, yet I personally believe a business needs to present their kind intention. With that, they can improve their business's image, and help them become a remarkable business.You may have seen or heard that several companies usually hold annul events like the benefit match, performance, concert to promote their new businesses. Although those types of events hardly make any profit in the beginning, yet, which could leave a strong impression to the audience or  could draw more clientele. That eventually will bring a beneficial outcome to a business.In conclusion, better and consumer-oriented businesses would still be able to make profits, as long as they also take the public's interests into their considerations.

Answer 2

Some business go out of their way to make profit, I think they overdo it sometimes. The interplay between devoting and self-interest is what influences a business to be successful or a failure.Businesses should have a moral duty and obligation. For example, some factories have environmental influences, the owner of factory should measure carefully to protect the environment and community, prevent the factory from spoiling it further, and review their result as an attempt to produce a favourable response of the public. This will further help to build a better business.All entrepreneurs would not have succeeded in such a business if they had not been such a contributer. There is no mean to exchange payoff with fame and gain, but I think business inturn shows their kindness. They can raise image of the business and help them become a noted business.The benfits of  matches, performances and concerts are a new type of enterprise, some companies will hosts these as annual events. Although this decision will not make profit in beginning, it can have a strong impression on the audience or customer, it will also have a beneficial result for the business.In conclusion, businesses can do any thing to make a profit, but it must take into consideration other peoples and public benefits.

2006-06-29 02:35:10 補充：
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