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為了參加今年的轉學考所以自己練習的作文,
希望朋友們以我寫的用法為主,
不吝幫我改正一下文法或是用法上的錯誤~
()內的就是我不太會寫的部分~
大致上就是這樣,
非常謝謝!

\"How to protect the enviroment?\"

Wish the repid progressin gin technology, we have a modern society(繁榮的社會) and comfortable, convinient life.

However, it has brought a terrible problem--enviroment pollution.

As we all know, enviroment is very important to human being.
Nevertheless, how should we tdo to prottect the enviroment?
In my opinion are as follows.

First, it\'s everybody\'s duties, also:Never throuw bargage, no matter anytime, anywhere.

Secondly,in order to decrease the _____(廢氣所造成的污染),we can take the bus or the MRT instead of driving motorcycles or cars.

Maybe it cost more money, but it\'s safe and enviromently(環保地),too.

Last but not least, if we saw andy people or factories do something whether ____enviroment____(破壞環保生態)and mismoral(不道德的),we should notice to the units concered(有關單位)as soon as possible.

In short,Everything has its advantages and disadvantages,just like 2 side of a coin.而身為現代人的我們,在享受舒適生活的同時,
也不要忘記飲水思源.
We do everything begin with small details(凡事從小細節開始做起),and trying devoted ourselve to protect enviroment盡可能地致力於維護環境.
If I can do it, I believe tha
t you can do it,too.(如果我可以做到,相信您也一定可以.)
but,action speak louder than words.
\"just do it.\"

為了您批改方便,所以每一句都換行~

謝謝囉! 我很需要知道自己錯在哪裡~

Answer 1

Thanks to the rapid advancement in technology, we are now able to live in a modern society(繁榮的社會), leading a comfortable and convenient life.
Unfortunately, there is always a trade off -- pollution , we have paid a terrible price for our enjoyment of the modern technology .

As we all know, environment is essential to the continual survival of human being. And in turn, we should try our utmost best to protect and conserve the environment.
My opinions are as follow.

First of all , it is everyone's duty to never litter anytime, anywhere for any reason.

Secondly, in order to reduce (air pollution caused by exhaust fumes廢氣所造成的污染),, we should take more of public transport instead of driving or riding motorbike.
It might cost more money and more time-consuming, but it is safe and at the same time, more enviromental friendly (環保).

Last but not least, if we saw andy people or factories do something whether ____enviroment____(破壞環保生態)and mismoral(不道德的),we should notice to the units concered(有關單位)as soon as possible.
( 這段我幫你重新寫一次你看看: Last but not least, we shall all learn to act more responsibly, that is, if we ever see any anyone or knows of any factories engaging in any enovironmentally damaging or (unethical:不道德) activities such as dumping untreated toxic waste or water, we shall immediately bring notice to the respective units concerned as soon as possible.

To summarise, Everything has it's pros and cons, just like both side of a coin. (For us, who lives in a modern society, while enjoying a comfortable life, we should never forget the source of our abundance comfort - the environment 而身為現代人的我們,在享受舒適生活的同時,也不要忘記飲水思源.) and should therefore, take and give in return.
( A small act goes a long way, starting from ourselves, starting from today凡事從小細節開始做起), we should try to develop the good habit of conserving natural resources and protecting the environment 盡可能地致力於維護環境)

If I can do it, you can do it too! (如果我可以做到,相信您也一定可以.)
Action speaks louder than words, "just do it".

PS. 寫作文時盡量不要用縮寫 it's = it is 這種的. 因為在文法上來講是不正確的只是平常我們方便而已.
大致上我盡量忠於原味
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