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Question

我要分享的是我第一次出國的經驗。在我12歲的時候，我爸帶著我和我弟到香港和大陸旅遊。在大陸深圳我吃了我人生中最難吃的麥當勞，也去了當地的動物園，看到了熊貓。他們實在是太可愛了，就像玩具一樣。到了香港，我們還去了香港海洋公園，看到了很多表演，有海獅、海豚和鯨魚。每一項表演都讓我覺得很驚訝。那次的旅遊，時間雖然不長，但卻令人覺得印象深刻。我想我會一輩子記住的。

Answer 1

My wanting what to share is the experience that I goes abroad for the first time.At I am 12 years old of time, my daddy brings me to go to the tours in Hong Kong and mainlands with my younger brother.The most difficult McDonald's eaten in Shenzhen in the mainland I eat my life, also went the zoo of the region, come in sight of the panda.They were really too lovely, being like the toy.Went to Hong Kong, we still went to ocean park in Hong Kong, coming in sight of a lot of performances, there are the sea lion, dolphin and whale.Each performance makes me feeling very surprised.That tour, although time isn't long, but make the person feel the impression is deep.I think I will remember during a lifetime.  ___________________________OR________________________I must share the experience which is I first time goes abroad. At I 12year-old time, my father leads me and my younger brother to Hong Kongand the mainland traveling. I have eaten MaC$donald in mainlandShenzhen which in my life most is unpalatable, also has gone to thelocal zoo, saw the panda. They really were too lovable, liked the toyto be same. To Hong Kong, we have also gone to the Hong Kong sea park,saw has very  performed, has the sea lion, the porpoise and the whale.Each performance all lets me think very surprised. That traveling,time although is not long, but actually makes one think the impressionis profound. I thought I can remember for a lifetime.I hope I can help you ^_^

Answer 2

I must share the experience which is I first time goes abroad.
At I 12 year-old time, my father leads me and my younger brother to
Hong Kong and the mainland traveling.
I have eaten 麥當勞 in mainland Shenzhen which in my life most is
unpalatable, also has gone to the local zoo, saw the panda.
They really were too lovable, liked the toy to be same.
To Hong Kong, we have also gone to the Hong Kong sea park, saw has
very performed, has the sea lion, the porpoise and the whale.
Each performance all lets me think very surprised.
That traveling, time although is not long, but actually makes onethink the impression is profound.
I thought I can remember for a lifetime.

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