英文兩個互相比較的outline

Question

Mall and supermarket

Mall and supermarket have three parts to divide there different that are variegation price and service.

Variegation:
1.Mall is variegation.
2.Supermarket is not much things to choice.

Price:
1.Mall usually wholesale for much less.
2.Supermarket retail for much more.

Service
1.Mall has services after you bought such furniture.
2.Supermarket hasn’t this kind of services.

Supermarket is going out of use in gradually because mall is more variegation, services and cheaper price so that it can bring more convenience to people.

這是兩個互相比較的用法，可以請比較董這個用法的人幫我做個修改ㄇ感覺不太妥當的感覺 如果可以的話，修改完再outline的下面寫一篇完整的文章

Answer 1

Mall and supermarket

Mall and supermarket have three parts to divide there different that are variegation price and service.
(The differences which distinguish between mall and supermarket are their prices, variations of goods, and services.)


Variegation:
1.Mall has more goods to choose from.
2.Supermarket doesn't have many choices.

Price:
1.Mall usually wholesales at lower price..
2.Supermarket retails at a higher price.

Service
1.Mall has after-sales services.
2.Supermarket doesn't have this kind of services. (not true tho)

Supermarket is going out of business gradually because mall has more goods at cheaper prices and it also provides after-sales services. It brings people better shopping experiences.

2006-04-21 11:43:23 補充：
最後一句把brings改成gives好像比較好

2006-04-21 11:43:44 補充：
都可以ㄅ