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If the personality could able to reset by brain operation, which part of my personality would I want to emend? I think I have a lot of shortcoming should to change, like lazy、curious、emulative、ill humor etc. And I most want to amend is my bad temper, the biggest reason that I am a person of quick-tempered and impatient, I am very easy anxious, and I can’t bear others dilatory. Sometimes I don’t think over when I do something, and the result is often do wrong thing, after that I will lose my temper and couldn’t control it that often affect my family and my friends, because maybe I will to hurt others by verbal attack when I anger, and I also easy with other people occur quarrel when other people has different opinion with me. And so on others will think that I am very difficult to get along, and don’t like me or hate me, causing me to get poor interpersonal relationship, somewhile even including me also dislike myself. Bad temper really is not good thing, I realize that nobody have duty to stand my temper, above all, my family and friends, they all the most close person of me, I don’t want to hurt them, I think I have to change my temper, even though I know that couldn’t change in the short time, so if the technology were high enough were able to reset my personality by some brain operation, I want to emend my temper, and that can immediately change it.

Answer 1

If my personality could be reset by my self-control, then what part of my personality would I want to have it changed? I think I have a lot of shortcomings that need to be changed, like my being lazy, curious, emulative, and sarcastic etc. And I mostly want to amend is to get rid of my bad temper. The biggest reason of that is that I am a person being short-tempered and impatient, I am very easily getting anxious, and I can’t bear others being dilatory. Sometimes I don’t think over again before I take actions, and then things can go wrong, which is not what I expect.  Then I lose my temper, which often makes my family and my friends suffer, because (x) I would have hurt others verbally when I get angry.  I also tend to have quarrels with those people who may have shared different opinions from mine. Others would think that I am very difficult to get along with and don’t like me or even would hate me.  It seems like that I would have a poor skill in the interpersonal relationship. Sometimes, I even would believe that I dislike myself for being short-tempered.  Having a bad temper really is not good. I understand that nobody should put up with my temper.  Above all, my family and friends are close to me the most, so I don’t want to hurt their hearts. I think I have to change my temper, even though it’s not an easy task to change a person’s personality in a short time. So if the technology would be able to get improved to change a person’s personality, I wish that my personality would be able to be reset by my self-control. The first thing I would do is to emend my temper, immediately.斷句: 句子太長, 很難抓住重點. 句中的主詞動詞, 子句的主詞動詞, 就亂成一團假設句: 雖然許多句子沒有If作為開頭, 但因為語氣上的不同,你其實用了許多假設句, 造成文章非常複雜

Answer 2

Helen-> expert!