以下這篇文章是我的中文意思：
我的夢想就是希望能靠自己的能力環遊世界。首先，我希望能玩遍世界各地各大遊樂園，尤其是世界五大迪士尼樂園。再來，我希望能吃遍世界各地的各式各樣不同的美食，並且能親自體驗到他們的民族風俗與文化。另外，我希望能走遍世界各地的光觀景點，並且能一一看到世界各地的奇景。總而言之，能到世界各地旅遊是我的夢想，而以上這些是我所期望的，希望在我的未來能一一實現。
請幫我修改以下這篇文章的文法：
My dream is to travel the world on my own. First, I hope to play in amusement parks in the world; especially, five of the biggest Disney Paradise in the world. Then, I want to enjoy many kinds of delicious food in the world, as well as exrerience their national customs and cultures by myself. Moreover, I want to step on all tourist attractions in the world and watch marvelous sights one by one. All in all, to travel the world is my dream, and something above-mentioned are expected; I hope my dream will come true in my future.
2006-04-04 07:26:01 · 3 個解答 · 發問者 陳嘉瑢 1 in 社會與文化 ➔ 語言
修正後：My dream is to travel around the world on my own. First, I hope to play in amusement parks in the world; especially, five biggest Disneyland in the world. Then, I want to enjoy having various kinds of delicious food in the world, as well as to experience their folk custom and culture myself. Moreover, I want to visit all the tourist attractions in the world and view marvelous sights one by one. All in all, to travel round the world is my dream, and the above-mentioned things are what I expect. I hope my dream will come true in the near future.註：1. 環遊世界 travel around the world2. 五大迪士尼樂園 five biggest Disneyland3. 吃遍世界各地的各式各樣不同的美食 enjoy having various kinds of delicious food in the world4. 民族風俗 folk custom5. by myself = alone 單獨一人；自己要用 myself6. 走遍世界各地的光觀景點 visit all the tourist attractions in the world7. 看到 view8. 以上這些是我所期望的 the above-mentioned things are what I expect9. 在不久的將來(比較好) in the near future
2006-04-04 08:03:05 · answer #1 · answered by River 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
My dream is to travel around the world on my own. First, I want to play in amusement parks around the world. Especially, five of the biggest Disney Paradise in the world. Then, I would like to try many different kinds of delicious food in the world,
as well as exrerience their national customs and cultures by myself. ------->這句話怪怪的喔!!!沒有exrerience這個字的芭~~~你是要說experience媽?另外阿~~~如果你第二
句話要說的和你第一句話要說的是不同性質的東西的話(such as food vs. customs)
連接詞不能用as well as喔!!!因為as well as 是在compare
你可以說:Nevertheless, i want to experience different cultures and customs while tasting those varies of food in different places.
Moreover, I want to step on all tourist attractions(???attractions means 具有吸引力的東西喔) in the world and watch marvelous sights one by one. All in all(沒有這個東西芭...友的話也不會有人用的!!), to travel the world is my dream, and something above-mentioned are expected; I hope my dream will come true in my future.
furthermore i hope for visiting different kinds of marvelous sculptures or scenic spots. (如果你想要你的文章好一點的話...不要只說你想去哪裡...多說說些你為什麼想去,去了對你有什麼幫助等等的) Above all are my dreams waiting for me to accomplish. Traveling around the world is my dream and i believe i will fulfill them in the future.
2006-04-04 08:15:22 · answer #2 · answered by ＊For Me＊╭★ 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
以下是我幫你做的一些修改：
My dream is to travel around the world all by myself. First, I would like to visit all amusement parks in the world, especially the five Disney Paradises. Then I want to try different kind of foods from different places, as well as experiencing different kinds of customs and cultures. In addition, I want to go to all famous tourist attractions in the world and visit them one by one. In conclusion, it is my dream to travel around the world. These are my expectations for my dream. I wish my dream will come true in the future.
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2006-04-04 08:05:55 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋