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請幫幫忙改文法或拼字的錯誤，感恩不盡～～～＞＜（很急）


An inquiring letter for information about businessman and agency
Content
The free floating house company has published an advertisement on the floating house monthly publication, which encouraged readers to send a letter to demand the free catalog. Richard Vanoy intended to devote himself to the business of selling floating house, so he sent a letter to demand the free catalog while inquiring the information of local agency.

Example
Ladies and Gentleman:
Please send me a catalog of the “luxurious life” that published on floating house monthly publication’s advertisement of your company.
Personally, I ‘m considering enter the market of floating house. Therefore, I’m eager to know the information about the wholesaler near the California Visalia city.
Thanks a million

Sincere
regards

Answer 1

A letter to inquire information between a customer and a local agencyContent One of the free floating house companies has published an advertisement to encourage readers to request for free catalogs. Richard Vanoy wanted to be in the business of floating house trade, and he wanted to obtain basic understanding of the products and services provided by the company. With the curiosity, he sent a letter to ask for a copy of the print. (catalog 不能幫助一個人建立一間公司 只能提供顧客一間公司的產品及服務. 要了解如何走進某個行業, 需要跟那行業的專家談過才能有所領悟.這樣的文章牛頭不對馬尾, 是不行的. 我只能盡量幫你改文法, 文章的意思要重新整理才行.)--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------以下是你文章裡文法的訂正: Ladies and Gentleman:Ladies and gentlemen,(其實應該要寫 To whom this may concern,) Please send me a catalog of the “luxurious life” that published on floating house monthly publication’s advertisement of your company.I would like to inquire a copy of “luxurious life” which was published with floating house monthly. Personally, I’m considering enter the market of floating house. I have been thinking about doing business in floating house. Therefore, I'm eager to know the information about the wholesaler near the California  Visalia city.I am eager to know the information of wholesaler near Visalia City, California. Thanks a million.Thanks a lot.

Answer 2

An inquiring letter for information about a businessman and an agency

Content

The free floating house company has published an advertisement on the floating house monthly publication, which encourages readers to send letters to demand for free catalog. Richard Vanoy intended to devote himself to the business of selling floating house, so he sent a letter to demand one of those free catalogs from local agency.

Example

Ladies and gentlemen,

Please send me a catalog of the “luxurious life” which was on the advertisement published on your "floating house monthly".
Personally, I am considering about going into the market of floating house. Therefore, I'm eager to know the information about the wholesaler near the Visalia city, California.

Thanks,