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I like the comedy because it`s can let me relax and laugh as much I like.I am a
sentimental person so I don`t to choose profound movies to see or when the end I`ll tears streaming down the face.
When I feel bad I always buy popcorn and a cup of coke to see the best funny movie to slacken my pressure.In the three hours,Ican take a rest and I can think the next way in my life.
Rencently I saw a movie,”The Pink Panther”,the story said that a soccer player died and the pink diamond in the field also vanish from his finger,the police handle the casr to be full of interesting let you smile never stoping.
Everyday we turn on the TV, the news report again and again other person have suicided, the life is beautiful that maybe sometimes has setback so long as you find the key sloves your problems,your future will be limitless.Now I am an unsuccessful student but I still trust myself keeping optimistic heart to do everyong,one day success is part of me.

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原文: I like the comedy because it's can let me relax and laugh as much I like.修改: I like the comedy because it can make me relax and laugh as much as I like.重寫: I like to watch comedy shows because they make me relax and laugh as much as I like.原文: I am a sentimental person so I don`t to choose profound movies to see or when the end I`ll tears streaming down the face.修改: I am a sentimental person so I tried not to choose to see movies that get me cried all over.原文: When I feel bad I always buy popcorn and a cup of coke to see the best funny movie to slacken my pressure.修改: When I feel bad, I always buy popcorn and a cup of coke, and to see the funniest movie to ease my pressure.原文: In the three hours, I can take a rest and I can think the next way in my life.修改: In the three hours, I can take a break or I can think about the next move in my life.重寫: In the theatre, I can either think about nothing or think about the next direction of my life.原文: Rencently I saw a movie...smile never stoping. (這裡整段都要重寫...)重寫: Recently, I saw a movie called ”The Pink Panther”. The story talked about the death of a soccer player. The Pink Diamond also vanished from victim's finger, and the police were handling the case. It was very interesting, and it made me smile continuously.原文: Everyday we turn on the TV, the news report again and again other person have suicided, the life is beautiful that maybe sometimes has setback so long as you find the key sloves your problems,your future will be limitless.修改: When we turn on the TV every time, there are always news about people committing suicide. Life is beautiful. Sometimes it can be rough, but finding a solution to solve the problem will brighten up your day.原文: Now I am an unsuccessful student but I still trust myself keeping optimistic heart to do everyong, 修改: I am not a good student as in terms of grades, but I still believe myself with an optimistic heart that I can do everything.原文: one day success is part of me.重寫: One day, success will be with me!