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Last summer, Little White came to my home. She is a puppy which has a shaggy and white coat. In the beginning, I didn`t care about her advent, I even tried to ignore her exist, because I considered that raising a dog must be a very bothersome work. But I still couldn`t deny that her appearance is very cute and adorable.


Even thought I always yelled to Little White to make her to be quiet, and I always turned my face to the wall when she is asking me to play with her by running around me, she still didn`t give up on me. Time after time, the one who surrendered to this game is me. I don`t know when I started to open my heart to her and have fun with her all the time, but I do know that I became to like her more and more by day after day. I even wondered how can I refuse to her passion at first.


Because of Little White`s coming, my all family did a lot of work to keep her and our house clean. One day, my mother said that as long as she get a job, Little White have to be sent a way. Luckily, my mother find a new job very soon, and unfortunately, Little White also disappeared very soon. I lost my friend just in a few day, although my mother told me that Little White was in my cousin`s home, I can go to see her anytime, I still didn`t want to. Because I was afraid that I might be out of control and take Little White away with me.


Until I was finally sure that I didn`t miss Little White so much, I went to my cousin`s home. I was surprised to see that Little White was became so big, and she seemed to be very happy. When she ran to me to made a hot lunge at me and licked my face, I knew that she didn`t forget me. I was so gratified.


Even if I can`t sure will Little White recognize me next time, I can promise I will remember her forever.


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Answer 1

LostLast summer, Little White came into my life. She was a puppy with a white shaggy coat. In the beginning, I didn't care about her; I even tried to ignore her pleas, because I considered keeping a dog to be a lot of work; but I don't deny that her appearance was very cute and adorable. Even thought I always yelled at Little White to make her quiet, and I always turned my face away when she asked me to play with her, she never gave up on me. Time after time, I was always the one who surrendered. I don't know when I started to open my heart to her and have fun with her, but I do know that I grew to like her more and more each day. I even wondered how I refused her when I first saw her.Because Little White's staying with us, my family did a lot of work trying to keep her and the house clean. One day, my mother said finally that as soon as she gets a job, Little White will have to be sent away. Luckily, my mother found a new job very soon, but unfortunately, Little White also disappeared soon afterwards. I lost my friend in just a few day's time, even though my mother told me that Little White was at my cousin's home and that I can go and see her anytime, I still didn't want to, because I was afraid that I might not be able to control myself and would take Little White home with me.When I was very sure that I wouldn't miss Little White so much, I went to my cousin's home. I was surprised to see that Little White has became so big, and she seemed to be very happy. When she saw me she jumped onto me and licked my face, I knew that she didn`t forget me. I was so gratified.I don't know if Little White will still recognize me next time, but I promise that I will remember her forever.

Answer 2

Last summer, Little White came to my home. She is a puppy who has a shaggy and white coat. In the beginning, I didn`t care about her (x) and even tried to ignore her (x), because I considered that raising a dog must be a very troublesome work. Yet what I still couldn`t disagree no more is that she is actually very cute and adorable. Even thought I always yelled at Little White in order to keep her (x) quiet, or I (x) would turn to (x) face (x) the wall when she was circling me and begging me to play with her (x). However, she seemed to never give up on me. Time after time, the one who surrendered to this game was me. What I didn’t know was that I started to open my heart to her and began to have fun with her after since, but what I do know is that I became to like her more and more (x) day after day. I even wonder how (x) I could turn down her begging in the past.Due to Little White`s presence, all of my family had to do a lot of work to keep her and our house clean. (x) My mother once said that if she got a job, Little White would have to be given away. (x) My mother did luckily find a new job in a short time, however, it was also the time that we had to say good-bye to Little White. I felt that I had lost a friend of mine, although my mother told me that Little White was kept at my cousin`s home and I could go to see her anytime I want to. In my deep heart, I was saying to myself, I couldn’t see her, because I was afraid that I might lose control of my desire to get Little White back to me.Until one day I was finally sure that I was not missing Little White so much, I visited  my cousin`s home. I was surprised to see that Little White had become a big dog, and she seemed to be very happy. Then she ran to me, making a hot jump at me and licking my face, at that moment I realized that she didn`t forget me at all. I was feeling so grateful.Even (x) I was not sure if Little White would recognize me next time I come to see her, I can guarantee by now that I will remember her forever.