幫幫我找出錯誤給予訂正 謝謝.

Question

不好意思!小的英文能不不怎麼好,所以請各位大大幫我找出文法錯誤的地方並給予訂正...拜託 Orz !!

Good evening everybody!
My mane is…
I live in 楊梅.
My family has father mother old sister and old brother and me five people.
My father is workman, his work form morning till evening.
Mother has home work to do.
Old sister is kindergarten teacher.
Old brother is a soldier.
I study in the 清雲 night school now!
Ride the motorcycle and goes to school every day!
I relish is watch new TV and movie or comic book.
I bring dogs and go out to take a walk every morning.
I play pc game or ps2 game on Saturday.
I go to visit night markets with the friend on Saturday evening!
I ride at home on sunder!
Thank everybody!

Answer 1

Good evening, everybody!Allow me to introduce myself.My mane is…I live in Yang-mei.There are five people in my family. They are my father, mother, an elder sister and an elder brother and I.My father is a worker. He works from morning till evening.Mother stays home doing the housework.My elder sister is a kindergarten teacher.My elder brother is a soldier.I study at Chin Yun Night School now.I go to school by scooter every day!My hobbies are watching TV news and movies and reading comic books. I usually take a walk with my dogs every morning.I play PC games or PS2 games on Saturdays.I go to the night markets with my friend on Saturday evenings.I stay at home on Sundays.That’s all.Thank you for your listening.

Answer 2

第四行應改成 : There are five people in my family, they are my father, my mother, my elder sister, elder brother and I.

第五行應改成 : My father is a worker, he works all day.

第六行應改成 : My mother is a housewife(家庭主婦), she has to do a lot of housework.

第七行應改成 : My elder sister is a kindergarten teacher.

第八行應改成 : My elder brother is in the army now.

第九行應改成 : I am studying in 清雲 night school now.

第十行應改成 : I ride a motorcycle to school every day.

第十一行應改成 : My hobbies are watching TV, going to the movies and reading comic books.

第十二行應改成 : I walk my dogs every morning.

第十三行應改成 : I play ((pc and ps2 games))->((最好改成 video games)) on Saturday.

第十四行 : 我看不懂ㄟ....不知道怎麼改

第十五行應改成 : Thank you, everyone!

2006-03-16 00:41:04 補充：
第十四行應改成 : I go to the night markets with my friends on Saturday evening.第十五行我想你應該是要寫 : I stay at home on Sunday.((我星期天都待在家裡))

Answer 3

Good evening everybody!
My mane is…
I have lived in 楊梅 for a long time.
There are five people in my family.
I havefather, mother ,old sister,brother, and I..
My father is a workman,
He goes to work in the morning.
My mom do the same thing at home.
My sister is a kindergarten teacher.
Old brother is a soldier.
I study in the 清雲 school.
Rides the motorcycle and goes to school every day!
I take dogs and goes out to take a walk every morning.
I play pc game or ps2 games on Saturday.
I visit night markets with friends on Saturday evening
Thank you for your listening