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Most people think it is difficult to judge a person by one\'s external appearances, they say external appearances can be misleading, but I think external appearances usually reflection the personality of a person, including personal hygienic habit, work hard level and relationship of love.

First, if you always dresses in dirty clothes, with your hair in disorder and look slovenly, may refection that you are unhygienic. Second, most proprietor think if you don’t care about your external appearances, you may were negligent in your work, and also have not good business achievement. Finally, if you have a date with your lover, but you wearing a terrible suit, that incident may put your lover in bad mood; think you have been ignoring him/her, also don’t care about him/her.

External appearances beauty is considered attractive, which lead to interpersonal attraction, there seem to be a logical relationship. some social psychologists say that good-looking people are not only seen as beautiful, they are also seen as having a more pleasant personality and as more competent than less beautiful people. Further more, studies indicate that it is possible that in reality, beautiful people are really as good as we think they are.

Answer 1

Most people think it is difficult to judge a person by one's external
appearance, and say what a person looks like can be misleading.  However, I
think one's external appearance usually can reflect the personality of such a
person, in my points, which includes a person's habits, attitudes towards work and relationships with others. First, if you always wear dirty
clothes together with messy hair, or look sloppy, which may reflect
that you are an untidy person. Second, if you don’t
care about your external appearance, most proprietors would consider that you tend to be more negligent with your
work and cannot perform better business. Finally, if you show up with a lousy suit right in front of your date, who would get upset to see you on the spot.  Your date might think you have been being ignoring how he/she is feeling,
also you are sending a message that you don’t care for him/her and you are being inconsiderate.While one's external appearance is
considered attractive and charming, consequently, this person could build better relationships with others. Some social psychologists say that
good-looking people are not only seen as beautiful, they are also seen
as having a more pleasant personality and as more competent than less
beautiful people. Furthermore, studies also indicate that it is possible
that, or in reality, beautiful people are really as good as we think they
are.

Answer 2

Most people think "THAT" it is difficult to judge a person by one's external appearances. "T"hey say external appearances can be misleading, but I think external appearances "IS" usually "THE" reflection "ON" the personality of a person, including personal hygienic habit, work hard level and relationship of love.

First, if you always dresses in dirty clothes, with your hair in disorder and look slovenly, "THIS" may "SHOW" that you are unhygienic. Second, most proprietor think if you don’t care about your external appearances, you may "BE" negligent in your work, and also have no good business achievement"S". Finally, if you have a date with your lover, but you "ARE" wearing a terrible suit, "THIS" may put your lover in bad mood; think you have been ignoring him/her, "AND" also don’t care about him/her.

External appearances beauty is considered attractive, which lead to interpersonal attraction, there seem to be a logical relationship. "S"ome social psychologists say that good-looking people are not only seen as beautiful, they are also seen as having a more pleasant personality and as more competent than less beautiful people. Further more, studies indicate that it is possible that in reality, beautiful people are really as good as "YOU" think they are.


YOU HAVE VERY LITTLE ERRORS IN YOUR WRITING, JUST SOME, SO PLEASE GO BACK AND LOOK AT IT AGAIN, MAKE CORRECTION!
3/11/06 ERIC ^^