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My Favorite Cartoon Character
Many people have their favorite cartoon character. Some people may like Doraamon, some may like Keroro, and others may like Naruto. I have my own favorite character, too. Now, let me introduce you the world famous Beagle – Snoopy!
Snoopy, created by Charles M. Schulz, first appeared on the newspaper on October 2, 1950. He didn’t look like he is now. For instance, he walks on two legs now, but originally, he walked on four legs. Snoopy is a cute dog which likes to imagine. He often imagines himself being such as a hockey player, a pilot during World War II, or a writer writing novels which start with “It was a dark and stormy night….” But in my opinion, this is not the main reason that makes Snoopy so special. I think it is his character that makes him so special and popular as well. For example, Snoopy will be angry with his owner, Charlie Brown, when his dinner is several seconds late. He recognizes himself a human, so he feels depressed when he is told not to see a movie. Besides, he treats his best friend, Woodstock, so well that readers feel sweet about his warm heart.
Some people might say Snoopy is stupid. I don’t deny it, but it is actually what makes Snoopy Snoopy, isn’t it? Anyway, this year is the year of dog, so hope you have a happy Snoopy New Year, and thank you for your listening.

請問：在Some people might say Snoopy is stupid.這一句，我想表達的是「有些人會說Snoopy很白痴」，那用什麼字來替代stupid會比較好??

Answer 1

花花：很難得在知識＋看到這麼長篇而且流利的英文。既然你虛心的就教於網友，我就雞蛋裡挑骨頭，給你一些建議與參考。原文：Many people have their favorite cartoon character 建議：最後一個字 character應該是複數。原文：He often imagines himself being such as a hockey player, a pilot during World War II, or a writer writing novels which start with “It was a dark and stormy night….” 建議：有點冗贅，可以考慮改為 He often imagin himself as a hockey player, a WWII pilot, or a novelist who likes to begin with " It was a dark and stormy night..."原文：Snoopy will be angry with his owner. 建議：把owner 改為master。因為owner這個字通常是指「物品」或「財產」的所有人。Snoopy 是一隻可愛的小狗，他的「主人」是Charilie Brown。原文：so he feels depressed when he is told not to see a movie. 建議：最後not to see a movie 改成 not to go to a movie. 因為  " too see a movie "是中式英文。原文：Some people might say Snoopy is stupid. 建議：用 studpid 這個字負面意義過於強烈，改為 " not smart " 婉轉一點。 

2006-02-05 21:30:30 補充：
我第二點的建議 He imagines himself 的imagin 打錯了沒有校對出來，抱歉。

Answer 2

寫得不賴!
沒什麼問題~看了我很久呢!!
Make a wish fou you !
"Happy Snoopy New Year,too."