文章已經在這了
這是一篇很多錯誤的文章
請改吧
It has come to my attention that many of you are lying on your time cards. If you come in late, you should not put 8:00 on your card. If you take a long lunch, you hsould not put 1:00 on your time card. I will not stand for this type of cheating. I simply have no choice but to institute an employee monitoring system. Beginning next Monday, video cameras wil be installed at all entrances to the building, and your entry and exit times will be logged each time you use electronic key cards to enter or leave.
Anyone who is late for work or late coming back from lunch more than three times will have to answer to me. I don\'t care if you had to take a nap or if you girls had to shop. this is a place of business, and we do not want to be taken advantage of by slackers who are cheaters to boot.
It is too bad that a few bad apples always have to spoil things for everyone.
2006-01-20 06:00:56 · 4 個解答 · 發問者 ? 1 in 社會與文化 ➔ 語言
樓下的謝謝你喔...
不過你改的好像有點無關緊要說...
還有高手會嗎?
2006-01-20 08:36:51 · update #1
It has come to my attention that many of you are cheating on your time cards. If you come in late, you should not put 8:00 on your card as your arrival time. If you take a long lunch, you should not put 1:00 on your time card as your back to work time. I will not tolerant this type of dishonesty. I simply have no choice, but to institute an employee monitoring system. Beginning next Monday, video cameras wil be installed at all entrances to the building, and your entry and exit times will be recorded each time you use electronic key cards to enter or leave.
Anyone who is late for work or late coming back from lunch more than three times will have to explain the situation to me. I don't care if you have to take a nap or if you girls have to shop. This is a place for business, and we do not want to be taken advantage of by slackers who are cheaters to boot.
It is too bad that a few bad apples always have to spoil things for everyone.
基本上你的文章沒有很大的錯誤 我只是用一些比較formal的字 (像tolerant instead of "stand for" 和 clarify some of your points. ) 我的建議是不要寫的那麼直接因為看起來太harsh了點
2006-01-20 09:47:49 · answer #1 · answered by J.J 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
這個文章不是在改錯誤的文法
所以大家都多此一舉
卻沒看出文章錯誤之處
反而愈改愈多錯
出題者應把原文的題目也貼上來
才會知道我的意思.
2006-01-23 04:01:28 · answer #2 · answered by helen 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
真是可怕的警告.
在這樣的公司沒人待得了很久吧?
2006-01-20 07:24:47 · answer #3 · answered by sheffia 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It has come to my attention that many of you lie on your time cards. If you come in late, you should not put 8:00 on your card. If you take a long lunch, you *should* not put 1:00 on your time card. I will not stand for this type of cheating. I simply have no choice but to institute an employee monitoring system. *Starting* next Monday, video cameras *will* be installed at all entrances of the building, and your entry and exit times will be *recorded* each time you use *your* electronic key cards to enter or leave.
Anyone who is late for work or late coming back from lunch more than three times will *need to have a talk with* me. I don't care if you *has* to take a nap*,* or if you girls had to shop. *This* is a place of business, and we do not want *slackers to take advantage of us*
It is too bad that *some people* always have to spoil things for everyone.
* * = 有改過的地方
2006-01-22 16:11:50 補充：
哇...他才改三個地方>_>
2006-01-20 06:20:33 · answer #4 · answered by Sam I am 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋