請幫我修改英文自傳 (急) 20點

Question

The financial finance is to study in while studying, study for one year, let between I and finance, on sale throughout professional knowledge of respect have deep understanding.

House have 5 member, one that is as family old, fond of , but does not rely on doting on delicatly. It is since the childhood by democracy for way to be communicated in parents last I,it let me of at care , Ann and environment under grow up, train my independence and the initiative , positive , glad to accept the life attitudes of the challenge and pressure. And the sense of duty is the idea that the parents give to me from childhood even more, impel me to grow up and study constantly.

While going to school , hope that can accumulate social experience early promptly by oneself, so extracurriliar time is different from other classmate's busy corporation activities, accumulate the experience of various fields with job enrichment instead. Replying and advancing and retreat when guests, and incorporate group's cooperative life from train oneself in working experience, let oneself be able to learn a responsible one degree , make individual character round to melt , temper appear strong incomparable toughness at the same time.

I think individual character of me Shen steady and careful shouldering the responsibility , resisting person who pigeonhole better, it is become one piece talent that is outstanding not to there is be the qualifications ,and ' study in order to practise ' I getting heavier most ideal, after academic credentials finish, I is it can reach industry serve to hope, on one hand prove the school studies in university, strengthen one's own practice experience on the other hand, think that a application studied of school is at work. I believe that can play a one's own well role and competent at happily wholeheartedly according to making use of the hearts of zeal , sense of duty and Kenya's study

Answer 1

The financial finance is to study in while studying, study for one year, let between I and finance, on sale throughout professional knowledge of respect have deep understanding. I have been studying finance for one year. Through the knowledge I have learned from the class, I think I understand more about marketing.House have 5 member, one that is as family old, fond of , but does not rely on doting on delicatly. There are five members in my family, I am the oldest one . You might think I look slightly skinny but I have strong charater . It is since the childhood by democracy for way to be communicated in parents last I,it let me of at care , Because of the open-minded way I was raise,therefore, since my childhood I can communicate with my parents very well all the time.  Ann and environment under grow up, train my independence and the initiative ,And under the enviroment which I grew up, I was trained to be independent, positive , glad to accept the life attitudes of the challenge and pressure.And I am glad that I developed possitive attitudes to challenge the pressures. And the sense of duty is the idea that the parents give to me from childhood even more, impel me to grow up and study constantly.The concepts about responsibilities that my parents gave to me from my childhood pushed me study hard all the time.  While going to school , hope that can accumulate social experience early promptly by oneself,I hope by going to school i can push myself learn more social experience. so extracurriliar time is different from other classmate's busy corporation activities,also learn other extracurriliar experience from my classmate's busy corporation activities.  accumulate the experience of various fields with job enrichment instead.So I can accumulate the experience from different job fields to enrich my knowledge.  對不起超過回答字數,黑字部份是我做的修改不過如上位大大所言 "寫的不錯喔"所以剩下部份就不改了

Answer 2

我也是看不懂, 這是新創的語言嗎??
請　北北　多多教大家你是怎樣看懂的

Answer 3

有些細部的變更，基本上，寫的不錯喔????
OMG~~~

說時在我真的看不懂...

2006-01-02 22:40:04 補充：
I don*t know the the condition of the first replier*s eye sight, but I know the passage is just not well written.

Answer 4

有些細部的變更，基本上，寫的不錯喔..... The financial finance is to study in while studying, study for one year, let between me and finance, on sale throughout professional knowledge of respect have deep understanding. House have 5 member, one that is as family old, fond of , but does not rely on doting on delicately. It is since the childhood by democracy for way to be communicated in parents last I, it let me of at care, Ann and environment under grow up, train my independence and the initiative, positive, glad to accept the life attitudes of the challenge and pressure. And the sense of duty is the idea that the parents give to me from childhood even more, impel me to grow up and study constantly. While going to school , hope that can accumulate social experience early promptly by oneself, so extracurriliar time is different from other classmate's busy corporation activities, accumulate the experience of various fields with job enrichment instead. Replying and advancing and retreat when guests, and incorporate group's cooperative life from train oneself in working experience, let oneself be able to learn a responsible one degree , make individual character round to melt , temper appear strong incomparable toughness at the same time. I think individual character of me Sheen steady and careful shouldering the responsibility , resisting person who pigeonhole better, it is become one piece talent that is outstanding not to there is be the qualifications ,and ' study in order to practice ' I getting heavier most ideal, after academic credentials finish, I is it can reach industry serve to hope, on one hand prove the school studies in university, strengthen one's own practice experience on the other hand, think that a application studied of school is at work. I believe that can play a one's own well role and competent at happily wholeheartedly according to making use of the hearts of zeal, sense of duty and Kenya's study