請幫我盯正履歷表

Question

請幫我看一下我的履歷表的格式,內容,文法和修辭或著一些小細節,幫我盯正一下個人資料部分我省略因字數太多
Job Objective
To contribute to WEI MING company as a marketing
personnel
Education
9/03 ~ 6/07 B.S.in International Trade, Tung-Hai University Taiwan
Major: International Trade
Minor: Marketing, Management
GPA: 73.76
Work Experience
12/04 ~ 9/05 DA DAO Language Institute TaichungCity
English Teacher Assistant (part -time)
 Corrected homework
 Helped with discipline
 Conducted telephone testing
 Talked with parents and answer their questions
 Helped to guide students
 Helped to manufacture the English tests
7/04 ~ 8/04 CARREFOUR Store Nan-Tou City
Salesman (part -time)
 Illustrated and promoted the electric shaver of Beelink
for Dad's Festival
Professional Skills
 Language skills: Mandarin Chinese, fluent in English ,
Fu-Ken(Taiwanese)
 Computers skills: Microsoft PowerPoint, Microsoft Word,
Microsoft Excel, Photoshop, Flash MX
 Type: English:35 wpm ,Chinese: 40wpm
Honors and Awards
9/05~ 1/06 Being a leader of class of International Trade in Tung-Hai
University Taiwan

請問假如加了improves students 那Helped to guide students是否需要剔除

Answer 1

                     Job Objective                     To utilize my international trade knowledge and professional skills and                      to contribute to WEI MING Company as a member of your marketing team                     Education9/03 to 6/07   B.S. in International Trade, Tung-Hai University, Taiwan                      Major: International Trade                      Minor: Marketing, Management                      GPA: 74/100                     Work Experience12/04 to 9/05 DA DAO Language Institute, Taichung, Taiwan                      English Teacher Assistant                      • Corrected and graded homework                     • Assisted in disciplinary processes                     • Conducted telephone testings                     • Maintained communication channels between parents and the professor                     • Provided student guidance                     • Assisted in creating English tests 7/04 to 8/04   CARREFOUR Store Nan-Tou City                     Salesperson                     • Illustrated and promoted Beelink Electric Shaver for Dad's Festival                     • Helped increase sales by xxxxx                     Professional Skills                     • Language: Proficient in Mandarin Chinese, fluent in English and Taiwanese                     • Computers: Proficient in Microsoft PowerPoint, Word and Excel, Photoshop,                         Flash MX                     • Typing: 35 wpm in English; 40wpm in Chinese                     Honors & Awards 9/05 to 1/06   Class Leader of International Trade at Tung-Hai University, Taiwan

Answer 2

請問假如加了improves students 那Helped to guide students是否需要剔除

2005-11-08 03:12:31 補充：
假如我改成這樣GPA: 73.76 in Taiwan’s scale也不是很理想嗎?

Answer 3

My suggestion is as followed:

GPA: Different countries have different scale for GPA. In your case, it's probably between 0 and 100. In the U.S., GPA is between 0 to 4. I recommend that you specify the scale to avoid confusion.

Work experience: Instead of telling your potential employers what you did, tell them what difference did you make to your for former employers. For example, when I saw "Helped to discipline", my immediate impression was you helped beat the crap out of the students. This will not appear to be a "good" thing as you try to get a job as a market personnel. Nevertheless, if you change it to "Improve students' integrity by helping them distinguish positive and negative behaviors". Now, this tells me that not only you are making a difference to our society, but you have the "communication skill" to do it. Communication skill is important as a marketing personnel. I hope this helps.

Honors and Awards: Give the name fo the award.

2005-11-10 02:13:49 補充：
if you provied some counseling to the students, you might want to add that (it'll take the place of "guiding").