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On Mother's Day this year, Ihad a special experience. That morning, my mother is not at home, my family also don't know where she go . Until afternoon, my mother called back home and said" I will not be home today, because I have to take care of your grandmother". After I listened to her the phone, I'm so suprices. Today is Mother's Day why my mother not go home , I can't celebrate Mother's Day on my mother. After the day my mother go home, Ijust ask my mother why don't you let I celebration with you.
My mother only say "youe grandmother is older, Ihave to spent a lot of time take care of her. And about me, you can stay with me every day, is notlost the Mother's Day".

Answer 1

I had a special experience on Mother's Day this year. In the morning, my mother was not
home, and my family didn't know where she went. Until afternoon, my mother called back home and said"I will not go back home today, because I have to take care of your grandma." After I got her call, I was so surprised. In this way, I couldn't celebrate Mother's Day with her. After she came back, I asked her why she didn't stay with me on Mother's Day. She said"Your grandma is older, so I have to spend a lot of time taking care of her. As for me, you can stay with me everyday so that everyday is Mother's Day,right?"

Answer 2

I will not be home today,>>>>>這個地方最好改成 I will not back home today
After I listened to her the phone>>>>>the phone可以刪掉
why my mother not go home >>>>>go改成come比較好喔
I can't celebrate Mother's Day on my mother. >>>>>on改成with或 for,with是有和我媽一起慶祝之意, for是有替我媽慶祝的意思２者可以擇一而用之
why don't you let I celebration with you.>>>>>要用動詞原形(前面有let-使役動詞)celebrate the day with you還有I請改成me(受詞)
youe grandmother is older>>>>>稍微有打錯要注意,還有older要改成old拉> I have to spent >>>>>既然有to了請用原形spend.>>>>>a lot of time改成more time
比較好,還有 take care of >>>>>spend後面的自一律要用V-ing拜託一下>!<>!<>!<
這個take要改成taking拉!!
And about me>>>>>>改掉寫成But for me
is notlost the Mother's Day". >>>>>最好改一下使語氣通順ㄅ過一時想ㄅ道怎麼改就是了(自己在想一下吧!!)

大致上問題就是這些不過你的時態方面要在看一下例如:That morning, my mother is not at home>>>>>既然是發生過的事情了請你用was not
my family also don't know where she go >>>>>didnt比較適當喔!!
其他還有一些地方的時態也ㄅ是很恰當自己要多多檢查加油喔希望你能得到高分