Brief in Englisch??

Question

Hey ich muss einen Brief an meine oma Schreiben und sie vom Internet shopping überzeugen is die Grammatik richtig??

Dear Grandma
There is a special thing the Internet. There are many online-shops where you can buy very cheap Christmas Presents like ebay. The things there are 20% cheaper than in normal shops. And the good thing is you must not to go to the downtown and at this season is it very cold. You buy it online and in three or four days someone bring it to you. I think it is better for you and I hope you think so too.

Answer 1

Dear Grandma. There is a special thing called the internet. There are many online shops such as E-Bay where you can buy Christmas presents. The items are 20% cheaper than ordinary shops. And the good thing is you don't have to go down town as it is very cold this winter. You buy the items online and in a few days someone will deliver it to you. I think it will be better for you and I hope you will think the same.

Answer 2

Dear Grandma,

There is a special thing the Internet.

Kennt Grandma schon das Internet, oder ist diese Brief ihr erste Information dazu? Ich hoffe, dass sie weiss, dass es gibt das Internet, aber nicht Onlineshops. Dann sag:

There is a special thing on the Internet. There are many online-shops, such as E-bay, from which you can buy Christmas presents at very good prices. The merchandise there costs 20% less than in normal shops. Another good thing is that you do not have to go downtown when it is so cold out. You buy the products online and they are delivered to you in three or four days. I think shopping online is better for you than going to the shops, and I hope you agree.

Love,
Timo

Nur diese: "you must not to go to the downtown" und "someone bring it to you" sind ganz ungrammatik, meine andere Anderungen sind auf deiner Wahl. "You must not" heisst "du darfst nicht"; "du musst nicht" ist "you don't have to". Und wir sagen "go downtown" ohne "to the", ich weiss nicht warum... Someone bringS it to you.

Answer 3

Dear Grandma,
how are you? Now that christmas is coming I thought I could help you by telling you about the advantages of the Internet. If you like, I'll come round and show you how it all works.
For example there are many online shops like ebay where you can buy cheap christmas presents. Everything is at least 20 per cent cheaper than in ordinary shops. And the good thing is you needn't go into town in the snow and cold. You order everything online and the parcels are brought to you in about three days. I think this is better for you because of your fragile health. I hope you think so, too. Why not give it a try this year?
Yours, Timo

Answer 4

Dear Grandma,
there is a special thing: the internet. In the internet are many online-shops like ebay, where you can buy christmas presents. This things are mostly 20% cheaper than in normal shops. And the best thing is, you don´t have to go to the downtown, because at this season it´s very cold outside. You buy it online and in three or four days you´ll get a pocket with it. I think it´s better for you and I hope you think so, too.
yours...