she's crushed and broken
too much left unspoken
she cries to much now
she doesn't know how
to move on after heartache
it's too much for her to take
everyone's been telling her
that everything will be fine
but she blames herself
for not seeing the signs
and she says, "is it alright to cry?
can you tell me why
this has to happen to me
tell me why"
tat's all i have so far. any comments or suggestions would be great
thanks
Shannon
2007-12-19 09:53:44 · 12 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
VERY good. You should become a songwriter if you aren't already.
Maybe make the song into kind of a story. I'd like to know why she's so heartbroken... the stuff you wrote wants me to know more!
2007-12-19 10:13:26 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Looks pretty good to me gal but I'm no expert and what I like not everyone agrees with. Keep it up and don't forget the light side of love in your quest. It can be beautiful as well as heartbreaking. Keep it up, look forward to reading more.
2007-12-19 18:51:19 · answer #2 · answered by Mike S 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
That's really good,you can tell you worked hard on that, i like the way you made it rhyme a bit so it doesnt get boring.
2007-12-19 18:01:11 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Yes, I really like it. I actually sang out the words and it sounds good. Good job! = )
2007-12-19 17:57:52 · answer #4 · answered by ↓ ♥мǝow♥ ↑ 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Unfortunately for you the Backstreet Boys have broken up.
2007-12-19 17:57:32 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 2⤋
I think its pretty good with a good tune.
2007-12-19 17:57:58 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice!
2007-12-19 17:57:08 · answer #7 · answered by UnknownD 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love the tune to it
2007-12-19 17:56:31 · answer #8 · answered by wheretheheckami? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it!
2007-12-20 07:11:41 · answer #9 · answered by Scooter_The_Squirrels_Wifey 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
pretty.
it has a rock-ish ring to it.
2007-12-19 17:56:39 · answer #10 · answered by Samantha 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋