help on a essay!?

Question

ok i have to do an essay on whats my passion in life and i chose guitar. but i dont think im heading in the right direction. see for yourself.

Joan Jett once said “my guitar is not a thing. It is an extension of myself. It is who i am.” (i dont know what to say here) My step dad knows how to play the guitar, and he would play the guitar to me when I was little. We had a banjo, and I would pick that up and start strumming on it, and pretend that I was his wingman playing along with him. Until one Christmas he gave me an actual guitar, and started teaching me how to play, but after a couple of months he said I was a royal pain, and got me a real guitar teacher. ( i need more things to say)

should i go with a different first sentence...is there a hook sentence you can think of....help my out anyway you can. the direction i was given=what is your passion? explain how you came to gro passionate about your intrest. give at least 4-6 examples of experiences, inspiration, and possible,

and possible future goals. you might have which can support your topic sentence.

Answer 1

To impress your teacher you could write about how the guitar music sounds and how it makes you feel. Using literary terms such as personification, metaphors, simile, and imagery can truly "spice" up your essay.

Answer 2

I think you are going in the right direction. I might edit out the part where he said you were a royal pain (that brings up a negative perspective) and just say, after a few months he hired a real guitar teacher for you.

I really like your hook. I think the examples of playing with your step dad helped your passion grow...but I would definitely expand on additional experiences. You are definitely going in the right direction--you just need to maybe web out your ideas and keep on subject...I think this is going to be an awesome essay :o) Good luck.

Answer 3

Describe how you play the guitar. How it is constructed eg the number of strings. The need for frets and the sound box.
The type of music that you like to play on the guitar. The type of music that can be played on a guitar eg strumming - singalong music or Spanish Classical. The octave range and how to tune the instrument.
How's that!!!

Grammatically, your first person 'I's' should be capital letters. Start a sentence with a capital letter. Joan Jett's statement beginning '"my guitar..'" should have a capital letter '"My guitar....'" Correct you spelling 'gro' for 'grow'.
You will not be able to convey the full meaning of your essay with incorrect grammar.

Answer 4

This is a description essay and philosophical one
so read articles on these types of essay
http://www.essay-paper.net/48-philosophy_essay.html
http://www.essay-paper.net/descriptive_essay.html